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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 12-30-2010 11:01 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Dark Stranger


you were lovely how you rose there
from the lipstick of the water
like a butterfly from her cocoon

but you arrived without struggle
more angelic as if wings were expected
and not just temporary adornments

and your glances were enchantments
wafting here and there under oak limbs
perhaps they were secrets escaping

or secrets being created for later on
when you had on your look back hem
barely covering those residue sensations

and your voice was wordless as moan music


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daark

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Amaryllis
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Mi now


1 posted 12-30-2010 11:09 AM       View Profile for Amaryllis   Email Amaryllis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Amaryllis

Beautiful weave, Dark...I hope and wonder if all your readers take the time to notice the music within the words...your lovely sonics, embedded rhyme...not to mention the font of perpetual metaphor, never stale or re-run! You are amazing.

A

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Dark Stranger
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2 posted 12-30-2010 11:16 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

ms a'mary..you bless me with your reads and comments..humble thanks lady!!
JerryPat
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3 posted 12-30-2010 01:58 PM       View Profile for JerryPat   Email JerryPat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat

Oh, I noticed the music within the words, Amaryllis. That is usually the case with daark.

Another thing I noticed were the secrets. I seem to have opened a large can of secrets recently. I see quite a few poems dealing with the subject, and in fact a poem I wrote today, which wasn't supposed to be about secrets, just happened to veer into them.

Love the hell out of the two words of the poem, "moan music."

To mimic is a form of praise unless
you have no thoughts of your own
Dark Stranger
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4 posted 12-30-2010 02:30 PM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

thanks JP, I appreciate your reviews
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside


5 posted 12-30-2010 06:17 PM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade

and your glances were enchantments
wafting here and there under oak limbs
perhaps they were secrets escaping

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

D~ you have a way of unfolding the feelings, that newness,
the unexpected and thrill of it all, and the beauty of a heart in flight.

Happy New Year, slick stuff~
ethome
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6 posted 12-30-2010 06:27 PM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

what a beautiful trip!

Love that last line and all the images leading up to it.

What you see and sometimes never comment on is bewildering.

Great work!!
Eric

ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call
and kinda driftin away from it all

Klassy Lassy
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7 posted 12-30-2010 10:07 PM       View Profile for Klassy Lassy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Klassy Lassy

There is something extremely sensual about rising like an angel born from water.  Nothing asymetrical mars the reflection of perfection.  And the kiss lingers...It's ethereal, something akin to a pheonix rising, but with decided feminity. I doubt this mystery could bear the weight of words, only the aura of livling revelations.  Imagination scuplting loveliness.
Andrew Scott
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8 posted 12-30-2010 10:15 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Required several reads, which was a good thing in my mind. Those last four lines kept me coming back for more. Thanks for sharing.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

Dark Stranger
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9 posted 12-31-2010 06:54 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

babyblue, thanks babe..and HNY to you too.

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ms kl, thanks lady friend for the depth of your reads, I do feel your eyes on the word sounds.


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eric, thanks amigo, I appreciate your reads.


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andrew, thanks guy for the reads and comments
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart


10 posted 12-31-2010 01:33 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

okay, so now you have my permission
to steal away just a little more
this next year...



smooth soothe, sir...
Dark Stranger
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11 posted 12-31-2010 04:13 PM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

ms sun...you make me crave veils...with wind behind them..thanks lady
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12 posted 01-06-2011 02:05 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

Beautiful. Did you know that I really like your poetry?

Ali-san
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