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where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2010-12-26 02:59 AM


I try to scream away
the empty echoes I create,
I try not to let you escape
into the holes that consume me,

there are times I have held you
with such bitterness and hate,
and a touch so empty,
that even the gods had to look away.

but it is so tragic that I choose you
over the ache,
because it was deciphered by you long ago
that I am more deserving of the pain.

I hope that now you get the quiet you wished for,
while you're living under my skin,
mending all of your wounds with what I've got left.


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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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1 posted 2010-12-26 06:34 AM


Ah, such heartbreaking beauty in this. I love the second stanza. Enjoyed.

-Trina.

Sticks and stones may break my bones, but chains and whips excite me...

JerryPat
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2 posted 2010-12-26 07:41 AM


The deep meanings come alive within the framework of this dark poetry. To accept the darkness as your own you accept who you are. Darkness is not an all bad place to be sometimes. In fact it is a survival technique which has been utilized for centuries.

It just doesn't get any better than . . .

"I hope that now you get the quiet you wished for,
while you're living under my skin,
mending all of your wounds with what I've got left."

. . . and the raven said, )!(%!~@~#&$ . . .

Rex Allen McCoy
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3 posted 2010-12-26 10:25 AM


Written like you're trapped inside a fading wish, super-glued in its passenger seat ... I was there once

excellent writing

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