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Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2010-12-22 01:28 PM

I saw her cry
as if a river held her tears for so long
the trees seem to forget she was there
waiting for the seasons to stop along the way

I waited for her to stumble,
To see her eyes meet me at the hint
of the branches that waited along the path

But she was unlike anything I had seen,
Black but delicate,
Almost as if you could wander into a room of mirrors,
Touching each side until the reflection turned to hers.
As she crossed the pond,
Her scent rippled through the river,
Aside the Janice streets of each neighborhood

Though, her passion waned,
Waiting to behold a long target of eyes
Like a small hint of her rosemary cough
her tired legs wrapped around me
Like a needle slowly sewing us together
Until the morning surprised the both of us.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2010-12-24 12:35 PM

Enjoyed reading this...James

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

2 posted 2010-12-24 01:51 AM

This is really good.
I don't understand it but I love it.
However, don't worry about that I'm not the brightest light in the sky.

Good stuff!

Eric

ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call
and kinda driftin away from it all

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

3 posted 2010-12-24 12:53 PM

Thanks James...hope all is well

Eric...appreciate the kind words. Don't be so hunble; we can all teach each other a few things. Take care

Tomer

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

4 posted 2010-12-25 02:54 PM

It touched me,as I also remember way back when~~ latearrival

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

5 posted 2010-12-26 05:51 AM

Tired, eh? Yet slippery as the injured bird or overnoticed tortoise, and to wit fairly indefatigable?

Another intersing write. Enjoyable to read and attempt to comprehend at least a little.

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

6 posted 2010-12-26 07:54 PM

Late, I'm happy this brought you back...hopefully it was to a joyous time in your life.

Cheers

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

7 posted 2010-12-26 07:57 PM

Thanks, Easy...always appreciate your comments. I'm sure your grasp of the poem is not too far off. Sometimes the words just flow, and they can be read any way you fancy to.

Tomer

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

8 posted 2010-12-26 10:01 PM

A compilation of sights and sounds and outright mastery of meaning.

To mimic is a form of praise unless
you have no thoughts of your own

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

9 posted 2010-12-27 12:55 PM

Jerry, thanks for the kind words. I hope to only improve, though, as I continue onward.

Tomer

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