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ILoveTheRain Member
since 2008-03-02
Posts 157GA 
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Dropping down abruptly from the sky Banging into the solid dirt Tears of blood draining through my eyes But I cannot feel, I am numb Opening my eyes; I can see Through the ignorance and the hostility I raise from under where I have fallen Oh, the excellence of your defeat |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Took you down and won the battle but lost the war. Very good, I like the vengence line at the end. Eric My favorite oxymoron, "rap music" |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
quote: Intriguing phrase. Enjoyed. -Trina. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
I know someone I want to read this. Right now she is down for the count, but the battle isn't over. Nice work. |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
`Oh the excellence of your defeat` was a splendid way to end this piece. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
what a splendid poem, the notion of defeat at the end is marvellous and strange...Rain inspired you with talent and genius. have a nice day yann |
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