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Juju
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since 2003-12-29

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In your dreams

0 posted 2010-12-17 01:14 PM

A Dedication

This story is dedicated
To the boy without any eyes
For he will only feel dry pages
Between the skin of his fingers
Nor he'll see the crumbling binding
Or read what's written on the pages

Because even with all these words
He will never ever see me

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

1 posted 2010-12-17 03:14 PM

There are a couple of ways to read this poem, which I like by the way. One way is to take it as is written and a blind boy is the object of the prose and all that goes with it. In my "Yuletide Request" I mention the blind, and go on to say they can "see" sometimes far more things than I can because of their heightened attention to detail they can "feel" with their hands. Just thought I'd throw that in.

Second, this could very well be a boy to whom is blind to what is offered up to him because of his callousness or inattention. Either way, I enjoyed your writing.

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ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

2 posted 2010-12-17 08:29 PM

I agree with Jerry as I read this face value or with an underlying message about a boy missing the signs of love extended to him.
Either way it's very good poetry as it stimulated the both of us to arrive at the possibility of a double meaning. One of the purposes of poetry is to relanguage the norm into unforgettable impressions. Much like the metaphor, simile or hyperbole.

Good work!

Eric

Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

3 posted 2010-12-17 09:11 PM

Yep, boys can be blind to the obvious... as my teenage daughter is finding out. Finding one that can read is always the best start. This was a fine offering.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

Prats
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since 2010-12-16

Posts 74

4 posted 2010-12-18 09:17 AM

this is a nice piece of work... i enjoyed reading it...

Heaven is not that place where you go when you die... it's that time in your life when you actually feel ALIVE!!!

easy1
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since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

5 posted 2010-12-18 09:40 AM

Very interesting and well-meant... A crumbling binding can be felt, of course, yet that phrase coming after use of "dry" and "skin" leads down that Freudian appearances road.

It is good to be able to imagine.

Imho the poem flows well and I wouldn't change a word of it.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2010-12-19 06:35 PM

Enjoyed...James

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