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Martie
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0 posted 2010-12-16 04:16 PM


To Weave a Basket

The marsh twilight's deep staining feet
across the stone bridge I to keep
there filigree of music starts
to weave a basket of my heart

Such variant day in wind a change
touched by opening package lain
alive from powder’s fragile mist
across the whispered light of kiss

I go there to the cave of be
all lit from reflected waters three
one rippled softly from my breath
one still as never moving chest

The third reflects the inside view
all dappled sunlight shadow hued
with sweet of longing bending near
a drop in time spread out in tear

I pull the plug within my soul
to empty cobwebs staining goal
and there in feathered imagery
I catch a hint of destiny

It like a coral ocean floor
distributes time through moonlit door
to see it sow imagining
and mend hurt flower fragmenting

Hold it up ‘tis sweet as sky
studded star sung lullaby
A canopy of slanted light
reflected from the fire of sight

Pull time across the plains of earth
into waterfalls exploding mirth
then watch the healing from the wound
of drinking drought by time perfumed

It’s plain as dirt on cavern floor
and light as whispered evermore
all parts be held or felt in clasp
from answered wisdom of the past

It is what stillness brings around
and listening pulls from warming found
in opening life times mending seam
to shake out dust from field of dreams

The marsh twilight deep staining feet
across the stone bridge I to keep
there filigree of music starts
to weave a basket of my heart

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2001

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JerryPat
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1 posted 2010-12-16 04:35 PM


There you go again, Martie, putting together a poem in the manner which I'm finding out is your trademark. Using phrases and words no one else would use to get your points across.

Phrases such as "alive from powder’s fragile mist / across the whispered light of kiss"

Some many of your verses are so embellished with your wonderful descriptive passages.

Loved this . . .

http://swamprighter.wordpress.com/

BluesSerenade
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2 posted 2010-12-16 06:26 PM


Oh my, this is such a glorious poem.
You weave nature and heartfelt emotion into the most exquisite basket.

It is lovely, Martie.

Sunshine
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3 posted 2010-12-16 06:42 PM


I caught the first basket...heaven only knows where I might have been when you gifted it a second time, but I do know this, my lovely.

This basket...

catches pearls.  



  

I am glad you brought it back. You've left unbelievable treasures in the last eleven years...and you will continue to do so. Some just need to be found, and posted again...to let all of the newer members view perfection.


Lori Grosser Rhoden
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4 posted 2010-12-17 08:32 AM


A radiant beauty that falls unfailing from your fingertips and such emotion it it does bring that from my eyes a tear does slip.
Bless you heart Martie.

Honeybunch
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5 posted 2010-12-17 09:01 AM


This is really lovely, Martie.  Yes, perfection indeed!

Helen

ethome
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6 posted 2010-12-17 09:38 AM


Ah Martie, only you can weave a basket like this one out of that beautiful heart of yours.

There's so much to comment on that I couldn't begin to start, so I'll just say this is superb in all aspects of your unique style.

Excellent!

Eric

Amaryllis
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7 posted 2010-12-17 11:20 AM


Lovely... I adore the metaphor: the heart as a basket woven... because weave too loosely and it will leak, yet if woven tight enough, will hold water... this whole piece is a dreamy, Keats-ish feast! Reminded of the atmosphere of 'La Belle Dame Sans Merci'.   

My best~
Amaryllis

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Martie
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8 posted 2010-12-17 12:35 PM


Jerry...Thanks so much for such a lovely comment. I appreciate your words.

Hi Lori...thanks..you weave some very pretty baskets yourself.  

Sissie Sunshine...Yep, the new poetry is not coming forth as fast as it used to. Thanks for always being so supportive.

Lori..what a lovely blessing your words are to me...thank you

Hi Helen...Not perfection, I'm sure, but one of my favorites none the less.  

Eric...thanks for such glowing words, my songster friend.  

Amaryllis...I like what you said about the basket...I hadn't really thought of it that way.  I like it!  Appreciate your words here too.

LeeJ
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9 posted 2010-12-20 07:21 AM


Hey Martie, Hello
don't seem to be able to write much poetry anymore, but still love coming back to visit my ol favorites...this was awesome...thank you for sharing...

hugs
Lee J.

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10 posted 2010-12-20 07:04 PM


I always remember my holier-than-thou brother saying if my girls took any college classes other than basket weaving, he'd pay for them to go.

What a sorry excuse for a million dollar man who couldn't weave a basket if his miserable life depended on it.


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