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Alison
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0 posted 2010-12-12 03:10 AM


Bill’s Magic


Regal mountains towered to reach up high,
Icy snow-capped peaks pierced clouds in the sky
Down below a small house sat on a hill
A man lived within who just called himself “Bill”

Bill was sad for he had no one to hug
He longed for a pet to hold close and snug
Where would he find one?  There was no pet store
And sad, lonely Bill was really quite poor

At dawn when the sky turned light from deep black
Bill walked out his door with a tattered sack
No one saw him leave so no one could know
Bill looked for a kitten deep in the snow

Dreaming he’d find one to hold and to love
He dug in deep snow drifts with only one glove
His left hand was bare and cold like ice cream
It once had a mitt, now lost like a dream

Was it planted in a garden in June?
Magic mitten trees grown up to the moon?
Bill’s search did not end, his hand was so cold
He dug and dreamed of a kitten to hold.

Winter days passed, Bill became very sad
His need for a kitten hurt him so bad
Or a puppy to hold or take on walks
One to listen to Bill as he shared thoughts

Bill kept on searching, he could not say why
But he knew of magic and what it hides
He looked and he sought; he sought and he looked
Snow fell down on him, he shivered and shook

At night he would go home lonely and sad
He cried for a kitten, feeling so bad
One dark night Bill knew that he was alone
It was hard to go back to his cold home

As he drew near, the air smelled warm and sweet
His nose tickled at the scent of a treat
He stared in a daze at the light as it shone
His house was lit up, with no one at home

Bill advanced slowly, things did not look right
A wreath on the door with red bows tied tight
Lights shown all around in red, blue and green
Bill shook his head; he was living a dream.

Praying not to wake up, he opened the door
And stared at mittens laid out on the floor
His eyes opened wide; he stared in the room
And smelled cakes and pies and sweet macaroons

Carols played soft ‘round the ever green tree
Bill stood in amazement – how could this be
He laid down his bag and walked to the fire
Warming his hands his eyes looked up higher

Sitting quiet on a beam way up high
Was a small, gray cat who gave Bill the eye
Bill was entranced, but he could not reach it
So the cat jumped down and curled up to sit

Purring, it leaned in and kissed him and rubbed
Bill reached to pet it … and gave it a hug
He suddenly heard a puppy-like yelp
As he turned, he jumped high, hollered out “HELP!”

Bill fell to his knees, held his cat with care
A small pup ran to him –black as a bear
He loved his pets and he gave them some names
With them at his side, he was not the same

Bill was never lonely with his new friends
Magic that comes never comes to an end
With warm mittens, cupcakes, painted new toys
Bill had much to share with small girls and boys

He marched down his hill, while Bear ran behind
And shared his treats with all children he’d find
Bill, once lonely, – and once sad and so poor
Learned if he shares love, he’ll find even more

When the magic left for other places
Bill brought smiles to once lonely faces


-

Alison

[This message has been edited by Alison (12-13-2010 01:12 PM).]

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nakdthoughts
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1 posted 2010-12-12 07:59 AM


"Bill, once lonely, – and once sad and so poor
Learned if he shares love, he’ll find even more"

I had to read it twice before responding. With illustrations this could make a great children's Christmas book.

M


JerryPat
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2 posted 2010-12-12 10:45 AM


I totally agree with nakdthoughts. This is a storybook poem if ever there was one.

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Alison
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3 posted 2010-12-13 01:57 AM


Maureen and JP ~

Thank you for wading through this and sticking with it.  I am so happy that you enjoyed it.

Merry Christmas.

Love,
Alison

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4 posted 2010-12-13 03:44 PM


ah shoot,,,,I was just going out to bury a kitten in the snow for the poor guy but looks like he don't need it now..oh well...cool stuff little one
Margherita
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5 posted 2010-12-13 05:09 PM


A beautiful Christmas story, dear Alison. Your own touch of magic is quite enthralling.

Enjoyed this much.

Love and warm hugs.
Margherita

Klassy Lassy
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6 posted 2010-12-13 07:26 PM


Alison, love has a way of making itself known, in word and action, and just simply perfect affection.  The deeper meaning of this comes through in a strong way, reminding me that we can choose what to do with our time to make it count, even when feeling solitary. A friend  sometimes tells me to "come out and be separate."  It may be the best and hardest advice I've every been given.  This is part of that gift.  
Klassy Lassy
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7 posted 2010-12-13 07:26 PM


Sorry, I accidently posted my comment twice.  ~K


ethome
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8 posted 2010-12-14 03:15 AM


Great write Alison

This is superb!

"Bill, once lonely, – and once sad and so poor
Learned if he shares love, he’ll find even more"

Write on!

Eric


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9 posted 2010-12-18 01:00 AM


I have to read this to my little great grandaughter. She will love this.
                                Ida

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10 posted 2010-12-19 01:41 AM


Alison - This is a truly delightful and meaningful story. I love stories!  Strange that I should read this now when only last night I was thinking of getting a kitten and then I thought that, no, one would come if I was meant to have one.  Maybe I read your story in advance as it were?  

My best to you for a good and meaningful festive season.

Helen

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