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Sunshine
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0 posted 2010-12-09 09:12 PM



It was her Ahhh…

Her ahhh…was like a slow
landslide of quiet noise,
sensual, sincere…

and sometimes even held a lilt of
Ireland within the nasal slide,

not abrasive as if
at the doctor’s command
when having to stick out one’s tongue,

but more a wondering, wandering
thought, often given after some
discussion and then, when
realization occurred…always

pensive, compassionate, sincerely
sensitive…it was never an
‘aha!’ moment…unless it was
over her own talking out a problem
when she finally discovered the
source of pebbled thought

or when she was winning at Scrabble.

That was a totally different resonance…

I think I loved her ahhhs the most when
the sound was uttered after a reading of poetry,

maybe mine...maybe Rumi’s…or maybe
if I read her own back to her
with different inflections,
that strange and different bent
only friends can give, and
she heard a wholly strange
and new story from her own words…

and it became the Ahhh…approving,
finally, of what she intended to hear,
after all.

© KRJ 9 Dec 10

a Thursday poem

© Copyright 2010 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
secondhanddreampoet
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1 posted 2010-12-09 09:34 PM


love that "source of pebbled thought" line!

a most interesting 'write' !!

JerryPat
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2 posted 2010-12-09 09:50 PM


The nuances of saying Ahhh can be delicate to understand. I think the wavelength needed for this understanding is personal and profound. But even to a novice you can surely tell the difference between Ahhh and Ahhh, it goes without saying.

Psst, the secret is to watch the eyes . . .

http://swamprighter.wordpress.com/

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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3 posted 2010-12-09 10:36 PM


Yes, thank you for reminding me.
Lori

latearrival
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4 posted 2010-12-10 02:25 AM


so different and makes one think ... jo
Dark Stranger
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5 posted 2010-12-10 12:39 PM


ahh like this one ms sun!!
Martie
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6 posted 2010-12-10 07:53 PM


Sissie....Interesting how a sound can be filled with so much meaning, especially when listened to by loving ears.
Spiros Zafiris
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7 posted 2010-12-10 11:33 PM


..yess, a beautiful ahhh poem; thanks


..>>spiros
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Andrew Scott
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8 posted 2010-12-10 11:49 PM


Nice, very nice indeed. Your writing is the reflection of truth and life itself. An "ahhh" unto itself. Thank you for sharing this piece. I bow to you and yours.
JamesMichael
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9 posted 2010-12-13 06:21 PM


A pleasure to "aaah" read...James
Klassy Lassy
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10 posted 2010-12-13 07:16 PM


I feel this to my toes, the throes of thought and revelation that illumines something meaningful so that the heart owns it.  I do that, too(although not always verbally), when poetry someone else writes feels as if I they reach in and say, I know you!  And I'm glad.  
ethome
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11 posted 2010-12-14 07:01 AM


"but more a wondering, wandering
thought, often given after some
discussion and then, when
realization occurred…always

pensive, compassionate, sincerely
sensitive…it was never an
‘aha!’ moment…unless it was
over her own talking out a problem
when she finally discovered the
source of pebbled thought"

Excellent personality depiction.

Ahhh, I think I got it and .... I enjoyed it thoroughly.

Eric


greytree
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12 posted 2010-12-14 10:15 AM


Just plain lovely!  
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