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Rip My Heart Out
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Rip My Heart Out |
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Skilerz Junior Member
since 2010-06-26
Posts 22Malaysia,Negeri Sembilan |
I'm sorry for being born if all i do is hurt you, I'm sorry if my existence in this world is not needed by you, All i wanted to do is to love you more and more, All i wanted to do is to make you smile when you're down, All i wanted to do is to hug you when you're cold, All i wanted to do is to see you happy, but, you're sorry for not hurting me, and you told me to get out of this world, All you do is hate me as much as you could, All you do is make me cry while you're laughing, All you do is leave me dying, All you do is stab me in my chest, but,I dont mind, hate me more and more, hate me as much as you want, I'll still love you dear, and if I die tonight I'll pause awhile and tell you to hate me as much as you want,but keep this with you *while ripping out my heart* It has been ages since i last write a poem and now I decided to write this poem because I broke up with my girl and I really loves her.I know this poem is not that good,but please do comment so that I can improve my skill.I need more advice.thx for reading I really appreciate it  [This message has been edited by Skilerz (12-06-2010 03:31 PM).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sorry to hear about your break up with your girl that's really emotionally painful and disturbing. Your words here are straightforward and honest and the pain of the break up comes through loud and clear. Keep writing and expressing yourself like this. You will always learn more as time goes on. Take care Eric |
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Skilerz Junior Member
since 2010-06-26
Posts 22Malaysia,Negeri Sembilan |
thx for your concern eric.yeah,it is painful,but i just have to get over it and time will help me with that.sure i will when i get more ideas. |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Ah, I've often wondered if the pain would stop if one "ripped out his/her heart"  well metaphorically speaking of course. Enjoyed. -Trina. |
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Skilerz Junior Member
since 2010-06-26
Posts 22Malaysia,Negeri Sembilan |
i dont know bout that.some told me once you lose your heart you wont feel a thing.but,well we know that u'd die if u rip out your heart in the real world.so it depends on how you write i guess.thx for reading |
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