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train 82612 |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
The train 82612 passed at 10:48 am From the East, may be inside there was a girl there who I love, It passed too fast And left only a bouquet On the immovable rails, A bouquet of questions That only know The wild orchids, Her flowered dress Flew away, Pink thoughts stayed on the railroad. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Poetic impressionism, dear Yann, truly wonderful! Love, Margherita  |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
Brilliant Yann! |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
You have a gem of a poem with this one. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
A true poet's dilemma. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Bastet Member
since 2010-05-07
Posts 246 |
A beautiful, snapshot-like impression of a moment full of pathos. I love the "bouquet of questions." It's an art to say so much in so few words. One I have yet to master. |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Fine writing, Yann.Images of speedy train, a beautiful girl, flowered dress, railroad. Bouquet of questions sounds brillant! "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I agree with the others...a pleasure to imagine. M |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
thanks margheriat for the marvellous comment. have a nice day yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks a lot martiniat for the supportive and kind comment. yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks Earl, I appreciate a lot. yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Jerry, love sometimes is a dilemna too, and uncertainties are painful even when looking at a train. regards yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks bastet for the beautiful comment, once master, then student we learn all from each other...Thanks again for the lovely words. have a nice day yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
hello Prasad, I always appreciate what you say, these are very ftreindly and supportive words... have a nice day yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks nadthoughts for reading and commenting nicely. yann |
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flash Member
since 2010-11-28
Posts 213miami beach, florida |
Yann: ah yes, a fleeting moment of love lost? More questions to ponder here than answers..I love poems with trains...train windows.. love your use of "wild orchids" like the wayward wind that can never be captured--except briefly--in a poem like yours! Bittersweet sad... Wonderful read! Al |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Such a beautiful image, yann. Reminds me of the lovely old movies I watched as a child. Ida |
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mikeandrew Member
since 2010-11-18
Posts 198 |
good job, I enjoyed reading your work. |
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