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2islander2
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since 2008-03-12
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by the sea

0 posted 2010-11-28 12:09 PM



We are weeds in Brasilia,
Brasilia lost in the minds,
We are under wings plane
We are on wings of chance,
We visit a ministry out of many,
Such a ministry of the fate?
or a ministry of fine weather?
They are so much alike and all
Aligned as useful temples,
Obsolete worships outside nature
Vast and deserted inside time,
The city is deprived of mysteries,
It is a woman without desire to please
Who attaches our hands in the back,
It is a woman without desires
That her hands exhaust the future.

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crosscountry83
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since 2009-07-30
Posts 345

1 posted 2010-11-28 01:03 PM


I love how you used alliteration, but on different lines. And the repetition of some words.. Simply amazing.
JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
2 posted 2010-12-03 05:55 PM


Enjoyed...James
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