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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

0 posted 2010-11-26 11:44 AM

And I'm sorry.
If my words
hurt you.

Its there
at the tip of
my tongue?
No, not there
there isn't any
dialog we can
exchange
to show you
the pain
there are only
tears

each one is
a word my
heart
won't let me
speak.

Its too late now
I may be
silent but
my heart has
spoken.

And I'm sorry.
If my tears
hurt you.

-Trina.

"A heart that can't feel its broken- can't heal."

[This message has been edited by s1nfully_1nn0c3nt (11-27-2010 09:08 AM).]

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

1 posted 2010-11-26 11:54 AM

One way of saying it without saying it.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

crosscountry83
Member

since 2009-07-30

Posts 345

2 posted 2010-11-26 12:03 PM

Ooh, the italicized words really add something to the meaning. Nice write. Amazing how the beginning and the end come together like that.

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2010-11-26 09:54 PM

quote:
And I'm sorry.
If my tears
hurt you.

Oh my. My eyes read a different word for hurt. They saw the word "haunt".

This speaks loudly.

Earl Brinkman
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since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

4 posted 2010-11-27 07:14 AM

The first and final stanza fit together perfectly. This is a nice piece of work.

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

5 posted 2010-11-27 07:22 AM

Very nicely put together, miss. Beginning with words hurting, showing how years are actually words, and ending with tears hurting...smooth!

(tongue misspelled)

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

6 posted 2010-11-27 09:13 AM

Jerry, Cross, Sun, Earl, Balladeer- Thanx for looking in.

haha I just noticed that (tongue), eh, I usually write in the dead of the night and rely on the spell checking to verify it

bad spell checker thingy! :P

-Trina.

"A heart that can't feel its broken- can't heal."

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