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gdcod3player
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since 2009-09-13
Posts 70
California

0 posted 2010-11-24 03:08 AM


The struggling was everything like hell
The heart you broke lost its love
Now baby can you make everything right?
I cant look at me and tell
Can you tell me what i havent done right?
The light has turned our love to darkness
My soul is floating alone
The girl of my dreams left me alone
The golden eyes you had have went dull
Duller than the knife you used to cut me in half

I'll keep waiting on the other side
Can you give me a reason before i start my walk?
I want to stroll around town looking for you
Dont let my heart fall into the wrong hands
You were my life
You destroyed me in the blink of an eye
Can you tell your eyes have created a cloud of darkness in them?
The beauty they used to have is never there
The ability to give me shivers is gone
The girl i loved has let me fall
Will i ever understand?


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ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
1 posted 2010-11-24 03:43 AM


I don't know whether any of us ever understand completely.
You've written some powerful lost love anger in this piece and I sure get the point of the write.

Good work!

Eric

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