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Juju
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since 2003-12-29
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In your dreams

0 posted 2010-11-21 05:58 PM


I Dreamed Forgiveness

The wind howls like a terrible monster
and made my apartment shake
and crack down to it's foundation

Snow crunched beneath the plow tires
While sirens and car horns echoed

Amidst this chaos I was alseep
And I dreamed my brother cursed me

When I awoke
The dried tears burned my skin
My hands were sore
clenched to my cross pendent

I don't know why
I had such a dream

-Juju


-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

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JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991
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1 posted 2010-11-21 06:49 PM


Ah, we don't dream, dreams invade our thoughts and have their way with us. Nice wordplay here.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

Amaryllis
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since 2010-05-20
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Mi now
2 posted 2010-11-21 08:02 PM


There is so much here... I love the way you`ve written it, in honest voice... can be oh so metaphorical, speaking to many things.  I pray your dreams will be more peaceful, tonight.  

My best~
Amaryllis

JamesMichael
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3 posted 2010-11-21 09:14 PM


Fine writing...James
Prasad Nataraj
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4 posted 2010-11-22 03:03 AM


Dreams have always followed me like shadows, so I can very much relate your thoughts. Fine writing, Juju.

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2010-11-22 06:39 AM


never know

I have strange dreams too

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
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West Coast
6 posted 2010-11-22 10:16 AM


in my dreams I don't listen to my brothers and wake with my colt cocked and ready to send the bad guys to freedom..(I clasify those as the good dreams..lol)

enjoyed the ink here ms

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
7 posted 2010-11-22 10:53 AM


Juju...dreams are so very important...
continue listening to them...




BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
8 posted 2010-11-27 02:54 PM


Makes one ponder where dreams come from.

Good portrait of the chaos and wonder of why.

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