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shirtless
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since 2006-04-29
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0 posted 2010-11-12 10:24 PM



you come
from the shower,
white towel
around your hips --
an albino leaf
about to fall

and even before
it reaches
the floor

I am remembering

I am writing this

I am framing the photograph

I am attending your funeral

I am an old man
lost
in the scent of you
as I dry
my wrinkled face
in a white towel

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JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991
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1 posted 2010-11-12 10:45 PM


Surreal portrait and a journey into life with one glance. Happens.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
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2 posted 2010-11-13 01:05 AM


Beautiful. Great style as always.
                              Ida

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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New Brunswick Canada
3 posted 2010-11-13 06:57 AM


Well done! Love the format and phrasing.

Eric

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
4 posted 2010-11-13 07:48 PM


As I read this, I am reminded of French artists, and poets, who took real,
and left it, real.

Thank you, Poet.

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
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5 posted 2010-11-13 09:29 PM


Another outstanding write.
Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24
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6 posted 2010-11-13 09:46 PM


Substance and style.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

passing shadows
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displaced
7 posted 2010-11-14 02:37 AM


outstanding

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
8 posted 2010-11-14 04:03 PM


touches me, more than one could know~

M

Dakota
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since 2000-05-25
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9 posted 2010-11-14 05:30 PM


Incredible longing in this one.

Love it!

Dave

JamesMichael
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10 posted 2010-11-14 09:08 PM


Nice...James
Balladeer
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11 posted 2010-11-14 09:54 PM


Iam beyond impressed with this one. You portray an entire lifetime in a few short lines in an amazingly powerful way.....terrific!!
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