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JerryPat
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0 posted 2010-11-09 02:38 PM


Loveliness
caught me staring
vivid emerald eyes stared back
unblinking
asking the unasked
touching my soul
deeply
saying she understood
approved
of this visual tête-à-tête

Meandering stream
rippling surface current
beneath antediluvian oak
laden with vibrant green leaves
nature's awning
a blanket spread
impending lovers
cool gentle zephyr
unable
twin passion to impede

My trembling hand she took
to her breast
natural crimson lips touched
my bone dry mouth
lingered there
tasting of jasmine sachet
tentative tongue
scorched mine
set off
simultaneous sighs

We have some time
whispered mouth against my ear
hot against passion spent
tangled skirt
twisted pants strewn
hodgepodge
here and there
I knew not words
to answer

Old am I now
life lived did survive
never forgot
nameless girl
ancient oak
summer days of love
tender and good
jasmine smells
memory haunted by her words
We have some time

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2010-11-09 02:47 PM


Hmmmm

I remember a boy
like this.

Enjoyed, Sir.


Eusta B. Mae
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2 posted 2010-11-09 02:52 PM


oh days of youth when all the time in the world was before us...a tender piece enjoyed. ebm
JerryPat
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3 posted 2010-11-09 02:57 PM


I know, Sunshine, we all have our memories. I have been blessed in that regard. Some stand out like the nameless girl.

Yep, ebm, and all that time we never once gave thought that it wouldn't be there forever. I guess that is best that we didn't. What is youth but forever.

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2010-11-09 03:04 PM


kewl stuff jp...I don't think she ever told me her name either..but I do remember her smiles
Amaryllis
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5 posted 2010-11-09 03:11 PM


Loved this... tender and passionate. Love the echo of the green in her eyes with the green on the tree... speaking of youth and new things...gorgeous  
.
Best~
Amaryllis

JerryPat
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6 posted 2010-11-09 04:17 PM


Yup, she was like that ds, a mystery girl to us all.

Amaryllis, I never forgot my mystery girl on a lonely Alabama road in the early sixties. This poem sparked a novel which I named, "Unholy Pursuit," and when the character tries to look her up it turns out she was a vampire.


. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

Amaryllis
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7 posted 2010-11-09 04:43 PM


Sounds fascinating, J! And sounds like the protagonist was a lucky fella, in more ways than one...
.
...she didn`t chomp him!  
.
I wonder if that one fella...dark hair, deep eyes.. remembers me from time to time...lol  I`m sure our past co-stars do in fact allow our memory to light upon them from time to time. At least I like to hope they do.  

JerryPat
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8 posted 2010-11-09 05:33 PM


Oh, I am certain that guy with the deep, dark eyes has visions of you quite frequently, Amaryllis.

As far as not getting "chomped," the Joe John Jefferies (named him for my three brothers, Joe, John and Jeffery), the protagonist did get a small, sliver of a nip in the throat. Enough to give him some problems later in life.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

serenity blaze
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9 posted 2010-11-09 07:55 PM


This had such a gentle touch...rather like reading a yellowed edge-worn letter that had been folded and re-folded until the creases had worn out.

Very nicely done--you manage "personal" much more artfully than I.

Enjoyed, yet again.

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10 posted 2010-11-09 07:59 PM


Funny how when we reach the time that we have little time left we recall the days when we had so much time. Where did all that time go??? A poem to make one think....nicely done.
JerryPat
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11 posted 2010-11-09 08:00 PM


That you liked the poem means much, thank you very much, serenity blaze.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

JerryPat
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12 posted 2010-11-09 08:01 PM


You said it, Balladeer, those were the days, now we just reminisce. Appreciate the comment.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

Angel4aKing
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13 posted 2010-11-09 09:23 PM


Pretty heated I may have to step outside for a moment lol definitely brought images to mind  

~~~kingsangel~~~

JerryPat
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14 posted 2010-11-09 09:49 PM


Happy to be the cause of some nice memories, thank you, kingsangel.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

Andrew Scott
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15 posted 2010-11-09 10:28 PM


Smokin' thoughts here Jerry.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

JerryPat
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16 posted 2010-11-09 10:32 PM


I agree, Andrew, smoking is the word. Thanks for dropping by.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

Prasad Nataraj
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17 posted 2010-11-10 02:03 AM


Fine romantic write, Jerry. Mysterious girl, she’s been haunting most of men all their lives.

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

JerryPat
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18 posted 2010-11-10 06:50 AM


Hah! That she has, Prasad, that she has.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

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