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Rise and Fall of Wealth at Heart
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Rise and Fall of Wealth at Heart |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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With three ex-wives expelled from mind. In sullen space he loomed and moped his distant memories mulled in smoke, with pillars of distaste inside. But every day his heart evoked silent thoughts of love regained a search for happiness through pain. Filled flush with wealth under his roof true to a fault with money's hope enticing minds with regal show and words to pitch his worth aloof. His song would trap a callow soul, with flash of kindness in deceit a merchant of contrived relief. But when she came one month, to clean, The darkness of his thoughts went dry, then sunward went his soul on high and filled with life his heart broke free! The shadows of his latter pride were lit with daylight and unchained from the guileness of his game. Then, too, she brought his faith to swell. His needs beheld in her sweet face uplifted by her tender grace. On him, like gentle rain she fell to water wisdom once displaced. He offered her his wealth and fame and at her feet he threw his gain. He watched her soft eyes slowly drop Stoned innocence filled her light laugh then she spoke pure unabashed deep words of love spilled from her thoughts. He heard a river's length of love to last, about her boyfriend and their plans and her eyes glowed solely for her man. Through years of trading he had fought where friends were shallow, fierce and dim where all the world was made to win and render profits at all cost. Yet this songbird sang over him from her nest of silver dreams and left him helpless and unclean |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I guess it's time to find another housekeeper great story here Eric sad but a fine read |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
. . . as the world turns so do the contractions of the heart and soul . . . |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
Ouch! unrequited is uniquely painful. Been there felt that, again I say ouch. ebm |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
The weather may be getting colder her and unrequited love surely will not warm me. Still...this is a good story that held my interest and should be read by others. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
He he another housekeeper he might not be affected the same way.... However, all his money couldn't possibly bring her the happiness of true love so she was honest and told him so. Probably hurt him even more but he'd already failed at being a real loving genuine person, however, she was!!....Funny how those things work out... Thanks PS a comment much appreciated... Eric |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
“Through years of trading he had fought where friends were shallow, fierce and dim where all the world was made to win and render profits at all cost.” So true of the world today Eric. Fine writing. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
A painful lesson, indeed...! Let`s hope he learned enough to grow  . I enjoyed the historical feel to the rhyme-scheme here, and the slant rhyme used are excellent. . ~Amaryllis |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
There are times when you have reminded me of those Guthrie guys, as you embody that spirit of singing stories with a subtle nudge of Aesopian flavor that is never condescending or didactically superior. This one seems lovingly polished as I imagine your guitar would be. You've got that "thing", lovie. Johnny Cash had it too. Love you hun, 'cause yer lovely.  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you for the visit Jerry. Yep, the good ol heart and soul enemy or friend the effect is tremendous. Eric Thanks for the comment EBM yes, to give one's heart so fully with no return is the greatest of emotional blows. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Earl Life's not all money. Some never learn that. Glad you read and liked the story. Eric |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
He watched her soft eyes slowly drop Stoned innocence filled her light laugh then she spoke pure unabashed deep words of love spilled from her thoughts. He heard a river's length of love to last, about her boyfriend and their plans and her eyes glowed solely for her man. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Great message.... Nice writing, ethome~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (11-21-2010 05:23 PM).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
yes, Prasad it's the way of the world for sure and sadly so many of the times. Thanks for the read and the comment. Eric Amaryllis Thank you for your eyes here and the historical part comes from me being almost as old as the verse style.....LOL! Have a nice day and I wish you the best. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Celeste Why thank you for such a lovely comment. And these words "You've got that "thing", lovie. Johnny Cash had it too. Love you hun, 'cause yer lovely" Why you sweet southern belle you....Ya'll got me all feelin so pleased!! Eric |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I never read you that Im not brought up short by what you say...money is nothing if that is all you have...a warm hand to wipe away the tears, soft lips to whisper hope, loving arms to cling to thru the night...money cant buy that |
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