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Before Dawn Still
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Before Dawn Still |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
Anticipation tip toes To the before dawn's brewing Finding the first sip of satisfaction Freshly forgotten dreams Below the surface School Waiting for my seine To capture a keeper Just long enough to Take in the shimmer Of its lines Before letting it go Back to the sea Of collective consciousness From where all Streams and rivers flow And muses play Hide and seek Among other fickle "Find me" games |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Nice characterization of the thought process humans are dealt. |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
Thanks Jerry. Didn't know that was what I was doing at the time...I was just writin' somethin'. ebm |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Sorry, ebm, I guess I misinterpreted it. |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
No Jerry, you are right. I just didn't stop and think of it like that.  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
For someone that was just writing for something to do this is really neat!! "Before letting it go Back to the sea Of collective consciousness From where all Streams and rivers flow And muses play Hide and seek Among other fickle "Find me" games" I really liked even though that cleavage of yours always throws me off. Love Ol Eric |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
I also love the last 4 lines, wonderful Best~ Amaryllis |
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Love the way you played with "brewing" and the "sip of satisfaction".....very cool!  |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
Eric-Cleavage? Now you have thrown me! But I hope you enjoyed the view!  ___________________________________________Amaryllis-Those were my favorite lines too. Thanks! ___________________________________________ 'Deer- Glad you liked that and thanks for the smooch |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
Very cool poem I like you style.... ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
Angel4aKing-Thank you, I like yours too |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Yup, nice write. Creates interesting images in the imagination. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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