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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2010-11-04 04:42 PM

Go ahead, tear apart my words…

Spell me in your ancient
binding

Latch me to your
key

Holler fore
as to warn me

Walk by my side
if you would step with me

Allow me to stand in your stead,
I promise I shall stick fast…

Whisper your soul
that we might mate for life…

Should I fall to sleep, to dream,
please, then, wear me well…

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (11-05-2010 11:07 PM).]

JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30

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1 posted 2010-11-04 06:00 PM

Fantastic. Although I am a JP, I know it isn't for me, but the JP it is for is lucky to have such as this written in behalf of what is and maybe could be. I wrote something similar many years ago called "take Me As I Am." Yours is better, by far.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

Cpat Hair

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2 posted 2010-11-04 06:28 PM

very nice Ms Sun... lots of sensual in this and you wear it well..

Eusta B. Mae
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since 2010-05-03

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3 posted 2010-11-05 08:35 AM

What a gem! (again) I do so love you and what you do. You always inspire

Eusta

Balladeer

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4 posted 2010-11-05 09:42 AM

Interesting! Your italicized words are:

Spell binding
Latch key
Fore warn
Side step
Stead fast
Soul mate
Sleep wear

I like it!

Prasad Nataraj
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since 2008-05-29

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Bangalore,India

5 posted 2010-11-05 11:08 AM

Fine writing.

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

Martie

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6 posted 2010-11-05 01:56 PM

Sissie...Love to see you playing with words and tearing them apart to make something new. Seems like a good thing to do for many things in life once in a while.

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

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By the Seaside

7 posted 2010-11-05 08:18 PM

Love this, your ending especially!

Really nice thoughts here, sunshiney one~

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

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Spring, Texas

8 posted 2010-11-05 10:20 PM

Cool!! My friend.

j.

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

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New Brunswick Canada

9 posted 2010-11-06 12:58 PM

What kinda sleep wear is that oh Sunshine wordsmith?

Love it and it's very clever.

Eric

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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Watertown, NY

10 posted 2010-11-06 04:58 AM

I love it. Enjoyed this.

-Trina.

"To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose."

Earl Brinkman
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since 2010-03-03

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Osaka, Japan

11 posted 2010-11-06 08:23 AM

I`m attracted to pieces that are different, that have that unique something. This is one of those pieces.

secondhanddreampoet
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a 'Universalist' !

12 posted 2010-11-06 10:08 AM

fine (innovative) poetic form!

VERY well 'penned' !

(a most interesting 'read')!!

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

13 posted 2010-11-07 12:50 PM

Hey Sunshine, as always it's a pleasure to read you, (i'm sorry it's been so long) i read two poems here and i loved them both.

Well Done!

mxx

JamesMichael
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14 posted 2010-11-07 08:30 PM

Go ahead and enjoy...James

The Lady
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15 posted 2010-11-09 06:23 PM

so unique
so you

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