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viking_metal
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0 posted 2010-11-03 01:59 PM


I want to place my fingers carefully upon your skin
a pianist prepared to play a masterpiece of heat

I want to smell the waves of your hair
crashing down on my face in tides

I want to taste your rolling laughter
filling the air with happiness

I want to

I want you.


Fall in love early, fall in love often.

[This message has been edited by viking_metal (11-04-2010 04:44 PM).]

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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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1 posted 2010-11-03 06:17 PM


Hmm...the title kinda threw me off. I find this Interesting though. Enjoyed.

-Trina.

"To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose."

BluesSerenade
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2 posted 2010-11-05 02:28 PM


Your title is good for the imagination as is your poem.

You're smoking hot, metal man~

ethome
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3 posted 2010-11-05 06:42 PM


I like that roll right on into the direct point.....passionate one...Right on!

Eric

viking_metal
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4 posted 2010-11-05 11:19 PM


sinfully boobopdeewop, thanks. i changed it. i was too lazy to title it something good when i wrote it.

viking_metal
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5 posted 2010-11-05 11:23 PM


BluesSerenade, thank you! You rule.

Eric, thanks dude. I appreciate the kind words, it feels good to write again.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Alison
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6 posted 2010-11-05 11:30 PM


I want you too.


(sometimes I just crack myself up!!!)

A

viking_metal
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7 posted 2010-11-06 12:05 PM


Back off, Alibumdrum! My fiance will fightchaaa and she's a feisty one!  

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Amaryllis
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8 posted 2010-11-06 12:45 PM


Hey Viking...
Glad ya changed up the title     This is very intense, your writing never bores.  
My best~
Amaryllis

viking_metal
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9 posted 2010-11-06 11:47 AM


Thanks Amdrambambam.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Alison
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10 posted 2010-11-07 01:56 AM


Hey you - a fiance too.  Life is good, huh.  Tell her that I just love to tease you and that I am only in love with your poetry.  Happy for you, Paul.

A

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11 posted 2010-11-08 06:27 PM


This poem is wonderful, hot, and full of your passion for your love. Great!


viking_metal
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12 posted 2010-11-08 10:43 PM


Aliboo.. Only joshing ya! And yes, I'm a lucky dude. I'm glad somebody is in love with my poetry.

Thanks Ken!

passing shadows
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13 posted 2010-11-09 02:52 AM


nice

viking_metal
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14 posted 2010-11-12 04:34 PM


thanks
JamesMichael
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15 posted 2010-11-14 09:06 PM


Enjoyed...James
Andrew Scott
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16 posted 2010-11-15 12:44 PM


Smokin'

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

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