navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #46 » When They Fall
Open Poetry #46
Post A Reply Post New Topic When They Fall Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Eusta B. Mae
Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903


0 posted 2010-11-03 08:38 AM




Lonely tears
welling within
my eyesolation
For
little is
of little consolation
when
they
fall…


© Copyright 2010 Eusta B. Mae - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat
Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991
Louisiana/America
1 posted 2010-11-03 10:44 AM


I agree. Tears do not console, they are there to be consoled.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

Eusta B. Mae
Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903

2 posted 2010-11-03 10:47 AM


JerryPat- thanks for the eyes and understanding.  ebm

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
3 posted 2010-11-03 12:19 PM


Well, I do like them in some cases especially after losing a loved one.....It's a grief release.
However, I know where you're coming from and this says it well.

Eric

Cpat Hair
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Patricius
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793

4 posted 2010-11-03 12:29 PM


lonely doeasn't mena alone...and it certainly can leave you eyesolated...

concise, with a nice play on words, that conveys the emotion well....

consolation...many forms of that I suppose, and sometimes nothing consoles

nicely done ma'am, as I have come to expect from you

Eusta B. Mae
Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903

5 posted 2010-11-03 12:57 PM


Eric, yes there are many kinds of tears it is true.  I'm an easy weeper so I think I have met them all. ebm
____________________________________________
Cpat, you are too kind, thank you for your words. ebm

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
6 posted 2010-11-03 04:10 PM


ebm - just when you think you've met them all some more will come along.  Blessing or curse?  Enjoyed your words.

Helen  

Eusta B. Mae
Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903

7 posted 2010-11-03 04:15 PM


Helen, Good question...I know I curse when I cry at cartoons LOL! ebm
s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105
Watertown, NY
8 posted 2010-11-03 06:49 PM


Ah, tears. Perhaps the heart's form of words. Enjoyed this.

-Trina.

"To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose."

Eusta B. Mae
Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903

9 posted 2010-11-04 08:24 AM


Trina-  "tears. Perhaps the heart's form of words"
that sounds like the seed of a poem to me...I like to see you expand on that thought. ebm

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #46 » When They Fall

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary