Things I did while in the belly of the Whale

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wranx
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since 2002-06-07

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Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2010-11-01 08:20 PM

Early on
I wondered exactly where I was
and how it was, I came to be there

Cold, dark, humidly gloomy
everything one would expect
if one expected to be swallowed so

Taking stock was simple enough
a small space, as living quarters go
But roomy, for metaphorical innards

Defined, all round, by planks of ribs
unformed bunting of shadow
and railings about my luck

After a time
I acquiesced, even embraced
my oddest of placements, settling
into the rhythm of the beast

Learning to move with the swell
of the hours, the tides of weeks
and the rush of water just outside

I counted, recalled and considered
I tied and untied every knot I knew
and tried on various histories

In the end
I sat by the woodstove filling notebooks
with what may or not be poetry
and drank

JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

1 posted 2010-11-01 08:34 PM

Hah! What a pickle you found yourself in wranx. Seems to me that you might have just tried eating your way out, but all is good though. Poetry is it and a bottle of sour mash will help you wash down the ordeal as you transcribe it for those in years to come to ponder, pinch the bridge of their nose and ponder on.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

2 posted 2010-11-01 09:06 PM

At least it is a peaceful habitation, where you can do a fair bit of contemplation and poetic scribbling. I for one truly enjoyed this piece of spindrift. I picture finding it in a bottle washed ashore upon the beach of my deserted island. Thanks for sharing.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2010-11-01 11:00 PM

Hey wranx nice to see you getting out...
What a fabulous analogy, you almost had me, got me thiking how did he do that, then I blinked and slapped my forehead.

Almost forgot how great it is to read you....almost!

Hope life is good and the fire is keeping you warm~

Winter
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since 2010-11-01

Posts 10
On the autumn wind

4 posted 2010-11-01 11:04 PM

Wow what an original topic! Like the spin you put on it, great writing.

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

5 posted 2010-11-01 11:26 PM

Familial.... Brother Ed

Your pen too reads a comfort to eyes and to soul... I've always admired the skill and insight that you bring to the words.

Jonah... a great write wrapped up nicely

good to see you Bro

eminor_angel
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since 2003-05-22

Posts 323
Canada

6 posted 2010-11-02 02:34 AM

love this.

"Learning to move with the swell
of the hours, the tides of weeks"

though at first I was just thinking of Jonah . ..

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

7 posted 2010-11-02 08:49 AM

Amazing imagery. Enjoyed.

-Trina.

"To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose."

Amaryllis
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since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

8 posted 2010-11-02 01:47 PM

Enjoyed this metaphorical journey... remembering that, in the end. he was released.

Fine writing, layered with meaning; depth.
Best~
Amaryllis
.
P.S.: You are truly Cpat`s brother, then??

Gifted family, if so....

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2010-11-02 01:55 PM

Hello wranx...great to read you again. The "innards" are as large as your creative imagination and the heart that beats there. I hope you'll share more.

wranx
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since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

10 posted 2010-11-02 05:45 PM

  Many thanks to all of you, for taking the time and the kindnesses.
  For those that "know" me, it seemed the years and pages spent in that drafty little shack writing my trivialities, needed an Epilogue.
  This, such as it is, is it.

Thanks to all the "new" eyes!
And a special thanks to all my old PiP pals!

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

11 posted 2010-11-02 06:05 PM

wranxieeee~

you mean...you've escaped the whale after all this time? You are as brilliant as ever, dear one~ and none the worse for wear despite having survived all that blubber LOL

~pixie eyes~~~

~be well, dear friend~

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