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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Rendezvous Your smile, strawberry in the drunken light of the night. We touch behind our eyes, past sounds of rhythm play along to the waltz in our heart. A ghost from the past plays moonlight echoes, on prayers and promises of buried dreams, dreams never captured by their vows. Retrospect the soul's thief, a late cracksman to rob the peace, the calm that rests with lost faith left on a shelf of promise in haste. Your familiar sweet breasts heaving on a wave flowing into the revolution of darkness we share. Sub rosa, we lie peaceful easy where, replete with love, we're drowsy, servants of covert hearts. We wish long into the strange night. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Retrospect the soul's thief, a late cracksman to rob the peace love the lines above... I don't often hear the term cracksman anymore and to have it used to describe retrospect, just icing... enjoyed your offering sir... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Oh so nice~ Gave me goosebumps~ |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
Everytime I read it I liked it more and more...enjoyed it very much. ebm |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Cpat. I appreciate the visit and the fact that someone knows what the cracksman is. Glad I got a smile out of you. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hi Blues Goosebumps eh? Want me to warm them up for you? Thanks for the read and the kind comment. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks EBM for reading this more than once and enjoying it each time. Very kind of you. Eric |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Agreeing with EBM... a write worthy of many re-reads  Best~ Amaryllis |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Amaryllis I appreciate the comment and meeting you at the same time. Eric |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
I love the way your words flow. Enjoyed this. -Trina. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
The last line, "We wish long into the strange night." fascinates me to no end. I like the feel of the words, words which could go either way, something delightfully wonderful coming your way, or disaster looms like a runaway avalanche on top of you. Great writing throughout. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Eric, This is very well done. I tend to like all your stuff. Bobby |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
James Thanks for the visit and the comment. Eric Trina Glad you could find the time to drop in and catch the flow. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Jerry You absolutely right, that's the feeling and mood I was trying to capture. I appreciate the comment. Eric BOBBY!! Where the heck have you and Bones been anyway?? I leave for a little while and Bones dies?? Good to read your comment here. Eric |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
This has some good lines in it such as `we touch behind our eyes`, dreams never captured by their vows and of course `retrospect the soul`s thief`. Nice. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Earl How's the weather way over there? Eric |
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