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Eusta B. Mae
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0 posted 2010-10-27 01:47 PM



Iambe dropped her overalls
On the bathroom floor
And stepped into the steaming shower
It was going to be a long one
She needed to think…
Or better yet
Quit thinking

Driftwood was driving her crazy
With all this love junk
Women like her and Driftwood
Swore off love long ago
They’d both tried it once
And it left a bad taste
In their mouths

Back in the day
The two of them
Were infamous heartbreakers
It was a game they played
To perfection
Love ‘em and leave ‘em
Before they got too close

Not that she really cared
About Driftwood’s feelings
Let her get hurt
Serves her right
Love wasn’t meant
For girls like them
She swore as tears welled up

This was all Driftwoods fault
Rattling old skeletons
She needed to go to Joe’s
But the thought of
Running into them two
Put a knot in the pit of her
Cussing, she got soap in her eyes

© Copyright 2010 Eusta B. Mae - All Rights Reserved
Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2010-10-27 01:52 PM


just smiling here.....


  you're on a roll and I'm enjoying it
nice to see the story line unfold and where you take it,

Eusta B. Mae
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2 posted 2010-10-27 01:55 PM


So did I clear up a few things?
Cpat Hair
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3 posted 2010-10-27 02:07 PM


yes ma'am...
  it ain't love if you love em and leave em but it passes for an unwritten rule of love in some people's lives.
  
The whole time I wrote Iambe, she was an enigma to the man who wrote her. Distant, yet close... a stand off of wills that would end in destruction if he exerted too much of his with neither of them willing or able to show too much for fear it would be used against them. But..Iambe saw the weakness in him, the heart, the care, and the patience...and used it to her advantage, perhaps oblivious to what it cost him.

your introduction of Driftwood and your using her as a dev ice to fill in the void that was what Iambe might have felt.. makes her more human, and more vulnerable. Something she rarely was when I wrote her.

from my pen,others might have admired her strength, laughed at her sometimes cruel humor, and wanted him to grow up... from yours, who knows, maybe she will be more understandable to simple minded like me.



Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2010-10-27 02:24 PM


oh heck...maybe she and driftwood ought to hook up and forget the boytoys...(whoops did I say that?)
Cpat Hair
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5 posted 2010-10-27 03:09 PM


lol.... maybe Dark is on to something here...


Eusta B. Mae
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6 posted 2010-10-27 03:23 PM


(laughing)oh you guys! Puhleeze!
ethome
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7 posted 2010-10-27 03:45 PM


Aw, back in the day, yes yes, so many things back in the day.

I enjoyed the life trek in this.

Eric

Eusta B. Mae
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8 posted 2010-10-27 03:57 PM


Thanks for checking it out Eric,  I'm glad you found something about it you liked. ebm
Marchmadness
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9 posted 2010-10-28 05:41 AM


Driftwood is most interesting. Following her story.
                       Ida

Eusta B. Mae
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10 posted 2010-10-28 08:06 AM


Ida thanks so much for letting me know you are keeping up with this what ever it is I seem to have gotten myself into. Hugs! ebm
JamesMichael
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11 posted 2010-10-31 07:34 PM


Enjoyed...James
JerryPat
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12 posted 2010-10-31 10:14 PM


Not in on all the inside stuff, but I liked this poem even so. Driftwood. Like that name also.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

Eusta B. Mae
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13 posted 2010-11-01 08:11 AM


Thanks James, glad you did! ebm
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JerryPat Glad you like what you've read so far...Don't worry too much about all the inside stuff...there is more you can read about Driftwood if you want and hopefully there wil be more to come. Thanks ebm

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