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martiniat8
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Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

0 posted 2010-10-24 04:47 PM




Zdenka,
it was a name that fell from the sky

A name he gave to a character,
a woman in a story he told his flatmate

He left his flatmate at an Argentinian Restaurant/Cocktail Bar
She had been kissing on this random guy she met in the streets of Prague

A "blick" man, a black man
from the darkest of Africa

He couldn't sit there and watch her,
when the Cougar was on the prowl

So he left, on a full moon night
when he was in one of his moods

Debauchery, his urge on nights like that
that was the only word that came to mind to describe it

He disappeared into the night
walking the wet steps
the cobblestone, brick laid, mason made
on the path God and man paved.

That night he discovered the make up of a Czech woman
an intensive examination of her framework
how their bones, their knees and legs in particular
were so delicate, slender, small and tender

like that of a bird...

He came back home and his flatmate quizzed him
as to where he went...

He did meet someone that night,
the name, if she had one, escaped him

So he told her he met Zdenka
the story was a combination of 3 women

A woman he had met on the internet,
prior to his arrival in Prague
The woman he ACTUALLY met, a blonde at a club
and the other woman, well, he couldn't even remember her story.

So he began to write one...

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Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2010-10-25 03:33 PM


you weave quite interesting tales..a bit of grit, a little insight, an eye for observation....
enjoyed sir....

Brad Majors
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Georgia
2 posted 2010-10-26 06:11 PM


interesting flow of words!
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
3 posted 2010-10-28 08:57 PM


Your poems are like a movie, but with only one take and so many fascinating scenes.
  
Love the continuing story of the Life and times of a martiniat8.

Cheers to you~


JamesMichael
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4 posted 2010-11-02 06:16 PM


A pleasure to read...James
JerryPat
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5 posted 2010-11-02 07:55 PM


Just goes to show you that writers can reach into the despairing air of humiliation, take his walk and seethe, all the while the back of his thoughts are saying, make this work for you . . . and he did.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

Prasad Nataraj
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6 posted 2010-11-03 06:00 AM


Fine writing.

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

ethome
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New Brunswick Canada
7 posted 2010-11-03 06:11 AM


I flowed in and out of this one all the way down through.
Intriguing and imaginative!

Eric

Amaryllis
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8 posted 2010-11-03 11:15 AM


Intense, genuine, engrossing... this is good writing!
Best~
Amaryllis

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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9 posted 2010-11-03 06:15 PM


An interesting write. Enjoyed this.

-Trina.

"To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose."

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