Woman-Saint, Why Am I Not Thou?

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Open Poetry #46

Woman-Saint, Why Am I Not Thou?

pen&paper
Senior Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

0 posted 2010-10-14 07:30 PM

It would be preferable, I think,
To be more animal than woman-
Unaware,
Without the burden of my worries
Multiplied by the world's.

No uncertainty
No clenching fear
My heart would not stop
My breath not freeze solid-
Cold, piercing in my lungs, screaming:

"Keep them safe.
Safe.
Why should they worry?
Take it from them.
Take.
In woman's unselfish way."

It is my job.
My duty,
My purpose.
Who am I to complain?
Selfish.
Animal.
Not woman.
Evil.

In selfishness, I am Demoness
No saint shines within
Mirror reflects the unburdened smile
Oh, Woman-Saint, why am I not thou?

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

1 posted 2010-10-14 11:07 PM

"It would be preferable, I think,
To be more animal than woman-"

I like the savagery here. women tend to bind their natural feelings with strings of civility.

I like this work.

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

2 posted 2010-10-14 11:46 PM

It is an interesting work, and a worthwhile read... it not being necessary to agree with a poet's sentiments to enjoy his or her work on a certain level. Selfishness can be wrong or right on the merits, and I have observed small animals wracked by dreams.

pen&paper
Senior Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

3 posted 2010-10-15 12:13 PM

Thanks for reviewing.

Y'all make me smile.

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

4 posted 2010-10-15 04:52 AM

I'm guessing even Mother Teresa has had a few doubts.
I love the first two lines, to be as carefree as an animal seems favorable.

My animal form...

-Trina.

"To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose."

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

5 posted 2010-10-15 07:07 AM

none of us are saints...we all have our own sins, if sins they truly are...

"good write" LOL

I see this stream from the mind and lips a bit like MacBeth and his ghosts...

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