Monstrous Confusion (A dark piece... with Holloween in mind)

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Andrew Scott
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0 posted 2010-10-09 11:18 PM

Written from the internal perspective of Frankenstein’s monster…

Life comes as a shock
A scream
Torn from cords
Last used in utterance of untimely death
A wombless birth
Within a tortured night
Surrounded by steel and static
A motherless child
Void of rhythmic memories
Beating heart
And maternal internal shell
Born of puzzled flesh
Stolen spark of divinity
And demented dreams dipped in madness
His is an empty existence from the start
Empty
Yet full
Full of chaos formed by memories
Forced into muscle and bone
By lives of predecessors now past
He is a monster
In the truest sense
And the body rages

The right hand is used to the slaughter
Of consecrated cattle
In the holy house of meat
A red fisted mauler knocker
While the left knows the chaste chisel
Molding marble
To bring forth sacred images
Of pious purity found within
Each hardened to the task at hand
But enslaved to conflicting consequences
Thus, neither can abide its reflection
And is left only to grasp the turmoil
Of its symbolic twin

While extremes wage war of purpose
Arms and legs crave solitary destiny
Yet, neither pede can pick a common path
Nor arms embrace a chosen wrath
For no single outcome do they claim as own
Where each has already greeted Death
In the land of littered stone and epitaph
Fates have been fulfilled
And Fortune fails to take notice
On this grotesque collection
Of collateral damage after death
The whole is far less than the parts
And the parts are separating at the seams

Encased within this conflict
Of connective tissue in torture
Heart and mind clash
Each seeking control by coercion
But colliding compulsions
Fail to compel
As the heart
In lost love’s passionate throws
Screams obscenities
Towards the tormenting
Murderous mind
Responsible for its ruin
Mind in mirth
Muses in memory of its final victim
Relishing the delicious screams
Torn from a lover’s grasp
So reminiscent in the echoes of its recent rebirth
And the voice within

Now in immortal mixture
Embodied as one
The endless struggle
Of Good and Evil
Lives in monstrous confusion
For there is no God
For the likes of he

Earl Brinkman
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1 posted 2010-10-10 08:12 AM

Frankenstein is the ultimate in tragic monsters in that he did not ask to be created but was thrust into a world that found him repulsive from the beginning. His brain was from an insane criminal that harbored murderous thoughts. On the other side he had a gentle side that craved affection. I would agree that he is a monster of contradictions. And as the final stanza says there is no God but for the likes of he. ---- It was interesting to get into the mind of the monster. Thanks for the Holloween treat.

Balladeer

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2 posted 2010-10-10 09:19 AM

Earl says it much better than I could. A very nice perspective, Sir Andrew. I wouldn't want to walk a mile in Frank's shoes. It's always interesting to see the other side of the coin.

bel1e
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3 posted 2010-10-10 11:59 AM

!!!!

wow~~what a feat~ enjoyed this immensely!

Andrew Scott
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4 posted 2010-10-10 04:51 PM

Gentlemen and Baby Girl... thanks for the read and write. Your words are the coin of the realm... or shall I say, the "treat" we all seek when knocking upon these blue doors.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

Cpat Hair

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5 posted 2010-10-11 06:52 AM

well done! indeed one can almost use the piece as a commentary on todays society..as well as the look into the "monster's" mind..

truly enjoyed sir....

Earl Brinkman
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6 posted 2010-10-26 06:42 PM

The second stanza of this work has haunted me these past few weeks. The monstrous hands at odds with each other, one capable of creating beauty but the other bent on destruction. With Holloween around the corner this definitely deserves a read. Haunt a few more people!

passing shadows
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7 posted 2010-10-27 03:26 AM

tremendous write! I have to agree with Earl here, he said it best

Prasad Nataraj
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8 posted 2010-10-27 04:13 AM

Opposites are complimentary, well some times. Fine writing.

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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9 posted 2010-10-27 06:39 AM

I've always pitied Frankenstein, the hideous monster who craved love, and acceptance. Truly we are all like him in one way or another. Enjoyed.

-Trina.

"To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose."

suthern

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10 posted 2010-10-27 10:44 AM

You've delved into the heart and hopes of a character that's basically become caricature and left us all a bit richer from the thinking you invite. *S* Bravo, Sir Scott... this is spectacular!

Eusta B. Mae
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11 posted 2010-10-27 11:02 AM

Way cool! I can only echo the great responses that came before me! I hope you repost every year. ebm

Andrew Scott
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12 posted 2010-10-31 01:18 PM

To one and all... Thank you for your kind responses. I've always found the "monster" to be a particularly interesting reflection of humanity at it's best and worst. In writing this, I was wondering what that would be like if those elements were to manifest themselves physically. Thus, the conflicting parts making up the whole.

Earl: I'm glad that second stanza grabbed you in such a way as to not let go. You managed to bring this piece back to life... or at least to the front page.

Thanks

Once again, thanks to all who took the time to read and write. I truly appreciate the effort... for it is the treat that completes.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

Amaryllis
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13 posted 2010-10-31 02:30 PM

I had to come find this other one by you... don`t know how I missed it... more excellent writing, Andrew Scott~! Captivating, horrifying, poignant. Again, with understated elegance. You are a class act.
Best~
Amaryllis

JerryPat
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14 posted 2010-10-31 02:41 PM

Fantastic writing and imagery throughout this masterpiece. Nothing but the bad seed springs from is the fate of evil thusly. Loved the last two lines in particular.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

Andrew Scott
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15 posted 2010-10-31 02:41 PM

Amaryllis: Why I must say "thank you" much. Your choice of adjectives makes this one blush. At the risk of self-promotion... If you enjoyed this one, might I also suggest "The Shovel and the Mist." It's somewhere earlier in this forum. Have a great Holloween.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

Andrew Scott
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16 posted 2010-10-31 02:44 PM

Why, thank you JerryPat. I'm glad you enjoyed those two lines, as I really pondered long and hard on how to end this piece. Thanks again for the read and write. Happy Holloween.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

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