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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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under sighing bows of bending palm fingers over by the sun fish fountain musical where shimmer plays with the shadow strums and waits for gold shifts in it's whispering she steps jaunty along her afternoon of bronze and gold and then those curves somewhere the blues are lingering on glass perhaps the soot man plays his sax songs and the lady of palms sways her sighs then slips into a coveting ocean of jewelry only the echoes of her footsteps linger behind and a kiss of perfume that baits the blind and the gods that dream they are her cellos ______________ daark |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
rich.... in the elements of imagery and metaphor.. one could easily hear the sax man playing and smell the perfume she left behind.. enjoyed sir, as always |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
The scent of a woman by the sea and your foot prints in the sand. ebm |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Thanks Cpat.. ______________ thank you ms ebm |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Definitely missed reading you, Dark. loved this! ~Sunkissed  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS.....You ignite the senses as you paint with words. A pleasure to read. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
I agree... this sparkles and sways... loving it, Dark ~A |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sunkiss..so great to see you back, thanks ms. ___________ ms martie, thanks neighbor, I am sure you have been to this location a few times. ______________ ms a'mary, thanks so much for watching |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
owg...what a vision you impart only to leave those with breath... less.  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sun....thanks lady friend |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Incredibly captivating, dear D.! Love, Margherita |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms mar, thanks lady friend... |
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naturegirl Member
since 2009-09-30
Posts 168England |
"only the echoes of her footsteps linger behind and a kiss of perfume that baits the blind". I really like this part. |
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Bastet Member
since 2010-05-07
Posts 246 |
A very sensual portrait. I can see, touch, feel and smell. All showing, no telling. Bravo! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms nature, thanks so much ________________ bastet, thanks for the read |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Mercy me, you make my heart sway!! Must be the cellos!! Gosh D~ love it when you write this way~ |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
stranger darlin' you still make me sigh in more ways than one words... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
babyblue..savoring your glances at my penspend..thanks babe __________ lady1, I can hear it in your voice sometimes like a waterfall of secrets..thanks lady |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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kindredspirit Member
since 2009-05-19
Posts 156 |
"and the gods that dream they are her cellos..." she seems the personification of a dream love. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks james.. _______________ kindred..thank you for the read and comment |
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