Open Poetry #46 |
The Edge Of September |
Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
As though frozen in time this heart lie dormant awaiting the coming season of change… when life, in cycles rearranges Time found us there amidst the fall Hues of Autumn did not dare compare to the colors of you and I.. I dared not to look beyond this day for only time could see what these few precious moments would be. I in daze, yet awake still feel this dream how your brush stroked my soul in artistic touch your pallet held shades unknown to me and even now amber rays float down leaving slight touch of warm on pale of skin too long touched by winters kiss In glance, a gaze now turned upward towards heaven eyes wide open the truth of you stares back at me. The season’s splendor had shown its grace and I would linger in this special place knowing it would only make more difficult the journey back to an ice queens lair a palace void from shed of tears crystallized, frozen in time {echoes of when, heard in rhyme} to only glisten by sun kissed visions of remember I met you there at the edge of September when Autumn melted me within the colors of your fall. |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Lovely! -Juju |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Great style, just beautiful writing, Donna, Ida |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Donna, it makes me happy to see you here and with such an amazing poem, that touches the heart. Love, Margherita |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
fine writing! (excellent Autumnal Romanticism) much (sustained) applause for this 'penning'! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
eyes wide open the truth of you stares back at me. ~*~ As it should be... if we cannot face the truth then we will never know ourselves. I'm liking this! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Beautiful work for the month. Lovely romantic lines filled with reflection. Eric |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
it is nice to read your words... well doen ma'am... you set the tone for the month with style. |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
I love this! ebm |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I remember reading this, and it is just as beautiful as ever. Love this time of year, your sentiments are absolutely glorious and the perfect compliment to the seasons of change. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Somy~ Yes, dear sister of my heart, you still have that class & style that keeps me reading and hoping for more. Autumnally timeless and your presence, priceless |
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rosepetals36 Member
since 2010-07-09
Posts 137Pa |
I really really like this -- Used to be rosepetals25 :) I never know what to say when I reply to a poem, so ignore the lameness! |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
So Donna-Beautiful! Loving this one of yours and that you still come and share. xoxoxo A |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
So Donna-Beautiful! Loving this one of yours and that you still come and share. xoxoxo A |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
wow wow wow~ do I love this ~*~
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You've written my favorite time of year, lovely. |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Pensive, Poignant, and beautiful. Sometimes one can only stand in the midst of leaves and remember... |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Donna, the beauty and ambiance of this poem crept deep inside me. It is exquisite. Owl |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
ahhh Bella Donna, this is absolutely lovely. hugs |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
on this 'revisiting': I say again, fine Romanticism! (very interesting 'structure'/form to this poem as well) I am particularly fond of: "and even now amber rays float down leaving slight touch of warm on pale of skin too long touched by winters kiss" ... and, I especially love the line: "I met you there at the edge of September" |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Good to see you posting.This is especially lovely. latearrival/jo jo |
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