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easy1
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since 2010-05-22
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Southeastern USA

0 posted 2010-08-28 08:28 PM



Keyboard clicks become
raindrops on the window pane,
and coffee grows cool.


© Copyright 2010 Mark C. - All Rights Reserved
Amaryllis
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since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306
Mi now
1 posted 2010-08-28 08:32 PM


Oh I like this; the keyboard clicks `become` can be construed two ways: both the action of `becoming` (turn into) and also the flattery; that the clicks augment the raindrops... (`become`)  
Very nicely done
~A

Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA
2 posted 2010-08-28 08:36 PM


Been there, done that. But it don't often rain here in SoCal.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
3 posted 2010-08-29 05:44 AM


When coffee grows cool
creative minds are busy
enjoying to BE!


Again, an inspiring offering from you. Thank you!

Love,
Margherita  

[This message has been edited by Margherita (08-29-2010 07:16 AM).]

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
4 posted 2010-08-29 04:25 PM


I would suspect that many a reader who happens upon this poignant senryu, will be nodding with understanding ~ and compassion.


EA

easy1
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since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209
Southeastern USA
5 posted 2010-08-29 09:30 PM


Thanks to all for your kind words!


Online people do sometimes have a window nearby, and occasionally a rain shower happens by... and your commercially-viable coffee plants do need cool nights to grow well, or so I have read.

Sunkissed
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since 2002-12-03
Posts 610

6 posted 2010-08-29 09:50 PM


Easy1, I agree with EA! So true!

As always, a pleasure!


~Sunkissed

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
7 posted 2010-09-06 10:55 PM


A pleasure to read...James
Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
8 posted 2010-09-07 10:37 PM


I'm nodding with understanding- and compassion. Thanks, Linda. I enjoy your writing easy1.
                             Ida

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