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Amberzlynnc
Member

since 2010-08-24

Posts 229
New Jersey

0 posted 2010-08-24 02:05 PM

I cannot love a man like you,
One so deceitful and untrue.
You inhale air, you exhale lies.
I've given you a thousand tries.
I thought we were near perfect and fit like a glove..
I've wizened up, a man like you I cannot love.

*Amber

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2010-08-24 02:18 PM

yes, short, but not too sweet is an apt title...
better always to recognize and move on, than to make excuses for and stay, knowing history will repeat itself..

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

2 posted 2010-08-26 11:19 PM

A lesson in "if they tell you who they are, believe them."

Well done!

Donovan Callinan
Junior Member

since 2010-08-01

Posts 37
Omaha, Nebraska U.S.

3 posted 2010-08-26 11:39 PM

Inhale air...exhale lies. Great line!

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

4 posted 2010-08-27 12:19 PM

Very succinctly put.

Is "wizened" intentional, as in "shriveled"? Or do you mean "wisened"? I cannot tell if it is a play on words, although in such a context I can understand if that is so.

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

5 posted 2010-08-27 02:33 AM

I like a poem that gets right to the point.
Ida

Novus_Os
Member

since 2010-07-21

Posts 115
West Coast, USA

6 posted 2010-08-27 03:02 AM

Ouch! How constricting, is the fit, of a tight, and leathery glove. In softness the fit is enduring, like feathers from a near flying white dove.

Yours is the better, but you inspire. So thanks very much.

Best Regards,

Novus_Os

Life is meant to be enjoyed, not just endured.

Sunkissed
Senior Member

since 2002-12-03

Posts 610

7 posted 2010-08-27 08:11 AM

I'm sure many can relate to the thoughts expressed.

Well written.

~Sunkissed

ken206573
Member

since 2008-10-14

Posts 487

8 posted 2010-08-27 05:08 PM

something I can relate to, but best to live and forget. The poem is short, inspiring, and wise.

Amberzlynnc
Member

since 2010-08-24

Posts 229
New Jersey

9 posted 2010-08-27 10:11 PM

Thank you, everyone.

And Easy1.. I meant "became wiser" so, I suppose it's "wisened" not "wizened". Thanks for pointing that out!

*Amber

Andrew Scott
Member Elite

since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

10 posted 2010-08-28 08:52 PM

Better to find the glove doesn't fit than to have it smother the open hand in false acceptance. Well spoken. Peace.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2010-08-29 10:17 PM

Nice...how long did it take you to wise up...James

Amberzlynnc
Member

since 2010-08-24

Posts 229
New Jersey

12 posted 2010-08-31 04:25 PM

@JamesMichael:
Unfortunately, a couple of years. But better late then never, I suppose.

*Amber

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