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Cpat Hair

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0 posted 2010-08-22 07:22 AM

Here she walks with little sway
As the grey Victorian skirts adorn her hips and are enough
To hide the sun while covering the thighs of passing hours

So it rains

I cannot see her eyes or the flash that comes with heated rise
And these tops of hills conceal the distance of her legs until
In some slow parade I find her modest gaze just another way
To pass the prayers for one so remotely chaste

In Oz it stormed

And heart of tin found the wind enough to lift
Such crinolines she wore as the flash of clouds
Revealed the outlined shape of calf and it sustained
The once upon a wish to dream Dorothy again

This Eastern Land’s refrain

But splattered drops that call the name in mock
Of passions knots, debased among the wash of grime
From windows without eyes to see how
The cut of skirt is designed to add only form
To this the shapeless day

At odds and evens with the way

Puddled remains along the Yellow paved belie the rage
That lays within the storms that pass or the crimson splash
Of sun upon her limbs when muslin skirts are swirled in storms lift
And she having given all the soul within her laugh or moan

What covered mirrors these

That would reflect upon the saddened face or the grey
Of her Victorian trousseau carried as a treasure she has marked
With embroidery floss the monographs she wrote
Of floods and Mondays pondered the loss that might come

From divided heart

She does not consider stolen minutes or the heart, but hides the clarity of eyes
By dropping veil and lowering gaze to tops of trees
And I hear the rustled skirts retreat

Then clutching ticket in hand

Board the train
with direct service according to the ad
To Emerald City
And Beyond

serenity blaze
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1 posted 2010-08-22 12:37 PM

I don't recall it raining in OZ, but I do remember the sky would get very dark when that misunderstood witch showed up. (I know a little bit about black clouds following dem witches around)

You well know your topic is a favorite of mine, but I particularly enjoyed the splice of lines you utilized here.

And yep, "I believe it's rainin' all over the world..."

Ever enchanting. Thanks.

Cpat Hair

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2 posted 2010-08-22 01:17 PM

ah... I do not know if in other incernations of Oz it rains or not..

I know the sky wears rain here in greys..not in the colors that came with rain on the plains.... and I know that without the colors... it is a dreer and plain dress she wears.

thank you for the eyes ma'am... and the kind words

Sunkissed
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3 posted 2010-08-22 01:58 PM

Can't wait to see what awaits you at the "emerald city"

~Sunkissed

Cpat Hair

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4 posted 2010-08-22 04:57 PM

Sunkissed... thanks for the eyes on this.. which is more a post Wizard sort of tale, when all the realm has seen itself change and as the meet of two worlds transforms..some go on or back to how things were, and for others they sttruggle to go on making sense of it all...

you kind words are greatly appreciated ma'am.. thank you

bel1e
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5 posted 2010-08-22 05:04 PM

ooooooo~ I love, love, love this <3

Cpat Hair

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6 posted 2010-08-22 05:13 PM

Belle... thanks for looking in..and the kind words. I am glad you found something in it to please you.

Eusta B. Mae
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7 posted 2010-08-25 12:53 PM

This is delightful! I live in the Land of Ahs and I know the storms there. Comes as no surprise in the movie that KS is in black and white. ebm

Cpat Hair

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8 posted 2010-08-25 01:02 PM

Spent 10 years in KS... and from the midwest originally, but now stuck someplace far east of there..
the storms in KS? far different than the rain or storms here... and while KS may be black and white in the film, there is still something to be said for open spaces and the real.....

thanks for the read... lol and sorry for the ramble... glad you found something to enjoy in this.

Amaryllis
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9 posted 2010-08-25 09:13 PM

I know you layered many meanings here, but I love to read it as the grey lady of rains that winters here in the Pacific Northwest

More beautiful writing.. enjoyed
~Amaryllis

Sunshine

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10 posted 2010-08-25 09:54 PM

Okay, enough.

I've read where others tell you to Publish...
quoting others I might add.

But this is beyond wonderful....

and I could go on, but I submit.

Author, Author....

Cpat Hair

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11 posted 2010-08-26 07:11 AM

Amaryllis
The grey lady of rain ma'am..was indeed the starting point for this scribbled bit.
That yo can relate it to the Raons in your world..is a compliment
thank you

Cpat Hair

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12 posted 2010-08-26 07:12 AM

Ms Sunshine... ma'am.. you are and always have been so very kind with your words and your encouragement..

thank you

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