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WTBAKELAR
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0 posted 08-20-2010 11:57 AM       View Profile for WTBAKELAR   Email WTBAKELAR   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for WTBAKELAR

Give me a moment, to catch my breath,
But, donít stop what youíre doing,
Hold me tight through this little death,
We can't stop our hearts from trembling,

Letís give in to this powerful need,
Take from me what you desire,
I canít help but crave with greed,
The passion that builds this fire,

You know what you do to me,
When our yearning becomes restless,
Let that wild obsession free,
As we drive each other breathless,

Brush your lips against my skin,
Touch me with your eyes,
Feel the heat as this fervor begins,
Listening to your pleasured sighs,

Hold me tight; donít ever let go,
Draw me within your pleasure,
Let the love that is in your soul,
Be the souvenir of your treasure,

You know what you do to me,
When your yearning becomes restless,
Let that wild obsession free,
As we drive each other breathless,

I love what you do to me,
When my yearning becomes restless,
Let that wild obsession free,
As we drive each other breathless.

The answer is always NO, Until the question is asked.

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1 posted 08-23-2010 11:18 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

I think this just might be my favorite of your poems.  It reads like silk and warms me like .. well, never mind.  It warms me.

Good job and thank you for sharing.

Alison
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2 posted 08-23-2010 11:28 AM       View Profile for WTBAKELAR   Email WTBAKELAR   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for WTBAKELAR

Thank you again, my dear friend,  I know I haven't been around lately, but when I get a chance, I drop in something I have been working on.

I am so glad you liked this poem/song.

Love like this always,
Tracey
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3 posted 08-24-2010 01:11 AM       View Profile for Amberzlynnc   Email Amberzlynnc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Amberzlynnc's Home Page   View IP for Amberzlynnc

I enjoyed reading this very much. Thank you for sharing.

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4 posted 11-27-2010 11:24 PM       View Profile for HippinTrippy   Email HippinTrippy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for HippinTrippy

I enjoyed reading this very much, Have you put it to music or written any for it? I can very easily hear it played as a melody.

It's not easy being evil, in a world gone to hell.

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5 posted 11-27-2010 11:33 PM       View Profile for mikeandrew   Email mikeandrew   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mikeandrew

very nice flow.
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6 posted 11-28-2010 12:01 AM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

OK, I think this poem needs to come with an oxygen tent, because who ever this was written for is going to need it. Nice work. Thanks for sharing.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

Honeybunch
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7 posted 11-28-2010 01:25 AM       View Profile for Honeybunch   Email Honeybunch   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Honeybunch's Home Page   View IP for Honeybunch

Yes, most certainly a warming and beautiful write! Well done!

Helen
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8 posted 11-28-2010 08:41 AM       View Profile for JerryPat   Email JerryPat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat

No use beating around the bush (pun), and you most certainly didn't here. Even, very readable flow of words about a subject everyone can relate to. Good.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

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9 posted 11-28-2010 09:56 AM       View Profile for crosscountry83   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for crosscountry83

I love the last two stanzas.. how they are repeated but altered a little. It would make a beautiful song!
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10 posted 11-29-2010 08:13 AM       View Profile for WTBAKELAR   Email WTBAKELAR   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for WTBAKELAR

Thank you all so very much for your wonderful comments on my poetry.  I am working of a few cords and notes for this song, and a completioin to make it a little longer.  

Thanks to every new reader of my poetry.
Tracey
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11 posted 02-14-2011 02:05 PM       View Profile for Angel4aKing   Email Angel4aKing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Angel4aKing

Love this poem...myself...although I can not write a love poem to save my life lol I am BREATHLESS!!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~
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