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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2010-08-16 04:17 PM



30 days hath September…

Rain falls easily from low clouds
A straight splatter of drops on asphalt
Puddles slowly in low places till in an lethargic spill
It finds the grates of drains to make its way
Somewhere along the river then to sea

Counting Fridays that are an agony
Of bare limbs and cold to come
49 hummingbirds sing a low accolade to words
Spread among the birch and hackberry
Waiting to be bound by leaves
A buried sin of dreams layered on the stony soil
No one reads but the wind

Strip the buttons down and stand
Before a naked fire to warm the skin
The soul lies deeper and is rarely touched but in passing
Of minuets recited on the glass
Or along the needled bark of twigs
it is the bones that last to rest alone
the body an abuse of chilled hands and knots
wrapped in selfish want

Come the passing sun and moon to hear
The aria sung deep in throat of tenured limbs
While a rustle of feet among the sharpened blades of glass
Cuts a moments silence in twain of Mass
Where well tapered candles sit in pools of wax
And the liturgy of benevolence is murmured softly
Deep within the stone

October has 31
And rain here falls straight to wet dark days
Shortened still by tilt of sun and clouds
Leaving the sheets of bed changed to remove the stains
Of a warmer leaving as lust spilled when it came
The late storms to pummel the curves
Horizons evolve in slow rise and fall
Of longer nights
And of dreams turned into Grimm tales
Told to frighten the chrysanthemum into
Blushing slight red along the quill of stem
Before a litany of syllables
Is whispered as soft down to bed the flesh
in used and tattered wings

The rain falls straight this day
To puddle a slow rise in low areas
Before in a lethargy of spill

It runs my thoughts
To you

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bel1e
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1 posted 2010-08-16 08:54 PM


ahhhh....I remember this rainstorm: )

         

katahdin
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2 posted 2010-08-16 11:47 PM


I can feel the rain falling and it gave me a chill.
Kat >^..^<

Amaryllis
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3 posted 2010-08-17 01:46 AM


Beautiful, beautiful!
~A

Nocturnal Pulse
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4 posted 2010-08-17 03:00 AM


Beautiful imagery, i love poignant endings, this certainly delivered.
Cpat Hair
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5 posted 2010-08-17 07:09 AM


Ms Belle, yes, nothing new to your eyes..you are kind to remember.

thank you

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6 posted 2010-08-17 07:10 AM


Kat..
the rain can indeed be chill and when the season turns towards winter, it seems to bring reflection along with it as another time of warmth passes by..

many thanks for the eyes onthis, and your kind words.

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7 posted 2010-08-17 07:11 AM


Amaryllis...  those words are not ones I use when I think of what I scribble, so I am indeed honored that someone might find them in any of my offerings here..

thank you, sincerely for such high praise

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8 posted 2010-08-17 07:12 AM


Nocturnal... many thanks for the kind words..
Margherita
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9 posted 2010-08-17 09:03 AM


quote:
49 hummingbirds sing a low accolade to words
Spread among the birch and hackberry
Waiting to be bound by leaves
A buried sin of dreams layered on the stony soil
No one reads but the wind



Oh, this touches me deeply. I read the poem last night and read it again now and find it even more captivating.

Love,
Margherita

Cpat Hair
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10 posted 2010-08-17 09:46 AM


Ms Margherita..
I am humbled you found something that might touch you in this...
my thanks for the eyes and the kind words you left

The Lady
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11 posted 2010-08-18 01:45 AM




ah but for a drop of rain and a warm voice and hand
"Strip the buttons down and stand
Before a naked fire to warm the skin"

this is one fine poem


Cpat Hair
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12 posted 2010-08-18 06:44 AM


Lady,
I've been in the places where a dropof rin was rare..treasured, just as the touch of a warm hand should be..

many thanks for the look in..and the kind words ma'am.

Sunkissed
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13 posted 2010-08-20 08:46 AM


Your poetry still has the power to move the heart. Beautifully written.

~Sunkissed


Cpat Hair
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14 posted 2010-08-20 09:04 AM


Thank you Ms Sunkissed one...
your words are exceedingly kind..


BluesSerenade
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15 posted 2010-08-20 07:35 PM


Oh I do love your ending, and everything leading up to it.

Your poetry is so alive, so vivid and emotional.  
I need to be in the mindset to leave a proper reply,
as I think you are right up there with some of the all time great poets.

I always come away touched by your complexity and compassion for the written word.

Klassy Lassy
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16 posted 2010-08-20 08:05 PM


If I had a book of your poetry, I would wear it out.  The images move my mood inward to vulnerable lispings and whispers and longings in the solitary echoes of  thoughts in the calander of life. I move in the rhythms of the rain as I read.

I like, too,  the way you used words to travel, and you also make me wonder at the meanings I miss in metaphor for the ones not so commonly used, and my natural curiosity stirs.  

Cpat Hair
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17 posted 2010-08-22 06:22 AM


Ms Blues..
you honor me with such words..and I amm sure I do not deserve thepraise..
still I thank you.. sincerely for finding something in my scribblings to enjoy and for saying so..


Cpat Hair
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18 posted 2010-08-22 06:23 AM


Lassy... Such kind words...
I thank you ma'am..and am honored to hear such praise from you

many many thanks...


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