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Tomer
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0 posted 2010-08-14 04:56 PM


It slowly turned into a discourse on love.
How two souls, across from one another,
Breathing the seams of the river
Can exchange the slightest wrinkle on their face
And understand the simplicity of each otherÕs thoughts.

She turned her head slightly; against the brim of the sun,
Her blonde locks like olive oil,
diving her hands
Into his pockets, tilting her neck
So she could allow the wind
To carry her scent
into his thin, pale face.

Her strapless, long neck lay into his body
Like a soft cold breeze, as the trees quietly slept,
They lay perfectly silent.
Like a symphony playing its very last note

They were two souls on the pitch of the river,
Where the vineyards twisted around the bridge
Just along the stretch of their bodies,
Where a small bridge overpass
Waited between the sun
Jettisoning the night to see
If her lips felt just right.

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katahdin
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1 posted 2010-08-14 08:34 PM


Just beautiful! enjoyed
Kat >^..^<

passing shadows
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2 posted 2010-08-15 01:54 AM


now this reminds me of a day long ago...

but it was long ago so nevermind

great piece!

Amaryllis
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since 2010-05-20
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3 posted 2010-08-15 02:48 AM


Most tender and beautiful.. I always enjoy your style, Tomer  
~Amaryllis

easy1
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4 posted 2010-08-15 07:10 AM


Very good, and I am getting good imagery from this, including both visual and emotional (somehow it is too early in the morning here for olfactory in that way ).
Seeing as it was love, I hope that she was physically satisfied somehow also.  

Tomer
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5 posted 2010-08-16 08:41 AM


Kat, thanks for the kind words..Passing, its never too late to find it again.  Amaryllis and Easy, much love.  Take care

Cheers

Tomer

The Lady
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6 posted 2010-08-18 07:39 PM




ahhh... this is beautiful Tomer.

Sunshine
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7 posted 2010-08-18 08:32 PM


Ah, Tomer...

I know Michigan, its light, its small lakes, its trees, and silence.

But you...found a memory.

Good stuff!


Tomer
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8 posted 2010-08-22 04:52 PM


Thanks Lady and Sunshine..happy you enjoyed.

Cheers

Tomer

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