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Open Poetry #46

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easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

0 posted 2010-08-13 05:25 PM

Desert storm clouds form
a door in the sunny draw.
We're headed for rain.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2010-08-13 05:47 PM

The scenery you evoke unfolds powerfully here.

Love it.

Love,
Margherita

Earl Brinkman
Senior Member

since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

2 posted 2010-08-13 06:13 PM

It almost never ever rains in the desert and I have never had a picture in my mind of that scence until now which makes this haiku one of a kind.

Amaryllis
Senior Member

since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

3 posted 2010-08-13 09:31 PM

I love the image on my mind`s retina of an actual `wall` of rainfall.. inescapable, perhaps.. so prudent to view it as a door, instead of an obstacle..
wonderful haiku

~Amaryllis

Misty Lilacs
Senior Member

since 2005-11-15

Posts 1060
White Birch Forest

4 posted 2010-08-14 02:54 PM

Rain brings such beauty to the desert.

ooxx Marti

katahdin
Senior Member

since 2010-07-01

Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.

5 posted 2010-08-14 08:28 PM

I love the haiku, you say so much with just a few words. Enjoyed
Kat >^..^<

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2010-08-15 01:59 AM

wish we were headed for rain, but no luck yet

great haiku! Love it!

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

7 posted 2010-08-15 06:57 AM

Thanks to all for your kind words.

The demarcation between brilliant sunny surrounds and a dark squall line approaching is greater in some ways in the desert. Impressive-looking clouds, yet in many ways better than a sandstorm.

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

8 posted 2010-08-17 12:24 PM

I feel the power of the storm in your words easy1, and long for it.

bel1e
Senior Member

since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

9 posted 2010-08-17 07:38 AM

there is quite a bit of exhileration in so few words~*~~

niiice~

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

10 posted 2010-08-21 09:57 PM

Good one...James

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