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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now 
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*Inspired by Cpat Hair`s eloquent tales of the road.. . Amaryllis would like to thank everyone sincerely for their gracious comments. Fact is...our wonderful poet has found an editor who wants to publish it! As such, she needs to delete it from the site. She wants everyone to know how much she appreciates you and your encouragement! [This message has been edited by Balladeer (08-28-2010 06:43 PM).] |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
This poem be slim, steady, and beautiful as a lake freighter in good weather. Wonderful imagery here. Hopefully the breakfast places aren't too few and far between! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Amaryllis First, I am honored..that anything I might scribble scratch out could inspire you or anyone to write... Second..As for eloquent, this is much more eloquent, and much tighter in its weaving than my rambling stories... there is a lot to admire ( if not envy) in the telling... your imagery is tightly woven into the emotions of the piece. Your flow and choice of wording takes the reader along those roads and the long hours...the sudden realizations, that dawn as slowly as the sun, but are still in some ways sudden.. indeed poet.... a very nice piece... again, I am honored, and humbled.... but glad too that I got to read this, for it tells of an essence that perhaps I have tried to capture in my own meanderings. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you, Cpat Hair.. I am the one who`s humbled, by your praise.. I`m glad you enjoyed the poem and not offended that I drew from your inspirations.. truly there is much to be celebrated in your own indelible style! I enjoy your talent  . Thank you also, easy1.. yes, breakfast came soon after, thankfully!  . Best~Amaryllis |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Amaryllis.. offended? surely you jest... (chuckling) how could one be offended by such a wonderful write as this, or by someone building off your own scribblings? as for talent... you must, in all respect, have me confused with someone else... I'm just a hack following a tired form and formula to tell a story, or try to. The talent.... is you and all the others who find a way to mend the words torn from heart or life and place them delicately on the page to create those moments for the reader, that move them... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Amaryllis...so many wonderful images in this...picking just one that captured me: "the periwinkle chill of a new dawn" You put me there behind the wheel...a good writer, you are! |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
This poem is scattered with wonderful clauses - `fighting slumber cobwebs across your nodding face` and `your hands habit now upon the vinyl wheel` A nice piece. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Martie, Earl Brinkman.. thank you both for your read and your words, it truly means a lot! ~Amaryllis |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"in the periwinkle chill of a new dawn" you write beautifully Amaryllis. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Lady, thank you so much! Appreciated..and for reading me, too.. ~Amaryllis |
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Nocturnal Pulse Member
since 2010-08-12
Posts 84Australia |
I'm envious, a beautiful write. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Tack sa mycket, Nocturnal friend! ~Amaryllis |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: It's a delight to read you again, dear Amaryllis. Excellent and poignant write, dear poetess. Love, Margherita |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Amaryllis - brought me back to the road of long ago when I read this. Nice write... BC |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you both, Margherita and Bill Charles! You make my day... ~Amaryllis |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
I really enjoy reading written answers like this to some one else's work. the connection kind of makes a finish to both stories.Thank you both for the intresting reads. latearrival/jo |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Amaryllis, thank you for the beautiful journey! Enjoyed. Kat >^..^< |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow!  yeah the man seems to do that to people well...inspire. Fantastic piece here! |
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