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brian thomas madden
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Ireland (between an ocean and a rock)

0 posted 2010-08-13 10:55 AM


Thread the tangled waves
of your midnight curls,
where tender dreams are netted
and shook free, as my trembling
fingertips trace a path of scars
to the cradle of your breast.
Beneath the rise of flesh
your heart echoes and I submit
to kneel in silent petition
while laurel leaves adorn your feet.

For a decade I was adrift
as a vagrant upon anarchic seas,
now I am yearning to dwell
in the hollows of your chest,
to weave an olive branch aviary
and perch among your murmurs of desire.
I'd lay siege to your garden of slumber
and breach its gate of polished horn,
so I may wake clutched in your embrace
for a final chance at an eternal dawn.

© Copyright 2010 Brian Madden - All Rights Reserved
easy1
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1 posted 2010-08-13 11:29 AM


Very beautifully composed, this work. Some of the lines resonate with me more than others, yet the effect of the whole is powerful.

I did have to look up the Daphne & Apollo story remedially, though.  

Amaryllis
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2 posted 2010-08-13 11:31 AM


Gorgeously, tenderly rendered.. I truly enjoyed this
~Amaryllis

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3 posted 2010-08-13 12:03 PM


well done poet... the language and wording tightly weave the piece and let the reader enjoy the form..


Martie
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4 posted 2010-08-13 04:54 PM


hi Brian...how goes it with the Irish lad?  Sounds like love to me...very lovely love!
brian thomas madden
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Ireland (between an ocean and a rock)
5 posted 2010-08-17 06:18 PM


Thanks you everyone for their kind replies.
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Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving
6 posted 2012-08-09 03:56 PM


only took me two years to find this thank you for showing me xxx Your poetry has been dearly missed xxx
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