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easy1
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0 posted 2010-08-09 09:32 PM





Rain falls away.
Thunder rumbles good-bye---
green twilit sky.

© Copyright 2010 Mark C. - All Rights Reserved
anya
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1 posted 2010-08-09 09:36 PM


I do love the consice nature of haikus style poems, you really end up with the essence of something. I think this is a perfect example of that. - anya
passing shadows
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2 posted 2010-08-10 01:28 AM


I can't say I've ever seen a green sky...but wow! I'd love that!

Nice write here!

Amaryllis
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3 posted 2010-08-10 03:24 AM


Nice one, easy.. quite evocative of the wet-washed moments just after a big storm..

enjoyed  
~Amaryllis

2islander2
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4 posted 2010-08-10 02:34 PM


original and colored write, I enjoyed


regards

yann

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5 posted 2010-08-10 03:26 PM


I remember the greenlit skies after a storm..
nicely done.. concise as the form allows, and descriptive.

BluesSerenade
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6 posted 2010-08-10 10:46 PM


Love the colors and how the sky evolves and drifts in slow motion.
Earl Brinkman
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7 posted 2010-08-10 10:59 PM


Nicely done here.  It is interesting that in the Japanese language there is a word `ao` that can mean green or blue.  A blue  sky can be `ao` as well as a green traffic signal.  
easy1
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8 posted 2010-08-12 01:17 AM


Thanks to all for your kind words, and, yes, it is sort of a greenish blue.

We get that after thundershowers down here sometimes, and I've seen it near sunset after winter storms up north, too.

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