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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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Your silhouette shown in the shadows breezing through the archway sending a draft from the edge of the sea caught up in the swirling your silhouette angled on a slant and sigh. I traced you in the sunlight drawn to your warm gaze vibrant and true like strings on a kite or salt on the rim I looked up and held on I felt and I tasted we flew. Looking back through the shadows slowly fading to sepia I delight in those sun days and wide open skies though sometimes my eyes burn from tears that I've cried. Facing the wind feeling the breeze blow still warm and still true silhouetting a sigh for those moments in time you were mine. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Dear Lori, First of all, your new picture is absolutely stunning! Everytime you put up a new one it becomes my favorite, but this one really is the cutest! I wish you had a book published of all your poems, how I would love to have that with me at the lake, just lying under a tree falling asleep with it on my chest, dreaming of ever blueautiful seaside serenades. I soo loved this new piece of your's. "I traced you in the sunlight drawn to your warm gaze vibrant and true like strings on a kite or salt on the rim I looked up and held on I felt and I tasted we flew. Facing the wind feeling the breeze blow still warm and still true silhouetting a sigh for those moments in time you were mine." I'm sure that warm breeze still whispers true. Lovely dear friend. Richard xx |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
What a delicious poem! You bring the reader into the scene, almost physically -- I felt this interlude as well as just reading of it. My view is that a poem is a chosen memory, that the writer shapes and shares, and the reader makes their own. I'm glad of this one. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
babyblue... you got some pretty on...inside and out...enjoyed you here babe |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Imagery and 'Romanticism' most fine! MUCH applause for this 'penning' !! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Richy~ You're just so sweet and I thank you for your kind words and gracious reply.  ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Ratman~ I'm happy to know this makes you glad. Makes me happy too that you took the time to stop by...thank you so much! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Dear stranger~ You flatter me so, but I wouldn't change a thing you know. Hugs and lovies, dark baby!! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Dreampoet~ I am pleased to know you were here. Thanks for leaving your nice reply. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
you make me wish I lived by the sea~~ always a treat when you post AND I absolutely love your new picture...it is so YOU, the YOU I remember!   M |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Once again, you make me smile. Thank you. |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Very nicely penned. I can relate to the cement or stucco and sand, the warmth of latitude, and the bright-backlit silhouette appearance---even to the friendly gaze and alas, also the sometimes fading of light in memories as they age. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Lori...you're lovely, as always.  |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
This is absolutel beautiful Blues. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Yes, Bluesy, you writing is as good as ever. You express this particular memory so beautifully and graciously. Hugs Helen |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I read this, and as I did, what I saw was the first picture I ever saw of you on this board, and I miss the you of then; the me of then; while what defiantly stares back at me is the us of now. We've traipsed through the sand of many places and everything we've seen gives the true words of today, the truth of all the yesterdays. And now we are the wisdom of all our tomorrows. Much enjoyed your words...today...and all the yesterdays. Walk on, my friend... j. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Hauntingly beautiful, dear Lori. And for some hidden reason this moves me deeply ... Love, Margherita  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
beautiful ma'am.... inded a pleasure to read |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Lori, I adore how you intertwine love and nature. You are a gifted poetess with a tremendous capacity for loving. May you be loved as much as you love! Love 'n hugs, Linda |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Wow.. stunning poetry, here.. you are very talented! Truly enjoyed this!  ~Amaryllis |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Dear Maureen~ You make me feel all nostalgic and sentimental remembering our time in Ocean City, a time I will never forget. Thanks for reading me. Big hugs to you! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Smiling back at you, icebox. Thank you dear man~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ easy1~ Thanks for complimenting my poem with the bright backlit silhouette. Your visit is much appreciated. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Martie, Martie~ You're sweet... Thank you for the lovely!! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Ms. Rose~ Hi there, and thanks for leaving your kind reply for me. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Dear Helen~ I try to write graciously, and to live that way too, not that I always succeed... but I try. Thank you always. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ jwesley~ Thank you for such a sweet sentimental reply, yes I miss those days too, but these days aren't so bad either. The process of life is complex at best, but I think it's human nature, that a part of us does indeed live in the past. You are such a dear and I thank you. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Margherita~ Thank you for liking that. Those moments in time were exhilarating, nothing like throwing caution to wind and living a little. Thank you, thank you.~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ cpat~ Well hey, what an unexpected surprise. Thanks so much for reading me, you made me smile you did. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Linda, dear heart!! Oh boy, brings tears to my eyes to see you here. Big warm hugs to you and thank you for reading. I have missed you, wondered about you, tried to write a poem about you, about how you glow in the love and light and all the goodness you bring to these pages, and to me. Your presence is always felt, and I just miss you all the time. Please take good care of yourself sweet one. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Amaryllis~ I am glad to see you back among us. Hope you're planning on staying for awhile. Thanks so much for your nice reply, that was so sweet of you to say so. [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (08-09-2010 05:54 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, Lori, you have brought tears to my eyes and a smile to my heart with your warm sentiments. You even attempted a poem about me?!? God bless you, Sweetie! Love 'n hugs, Linda |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
rich~~ ~enjoyed this~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Darling girl, you're looking so good! and this satisfied my salty tooth. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Love you, Linda~ Baby belle~ always so so nice to see you here. Thanks Sunshiney one~ Wow wow, I was thinking of you today, just stuff you know, and here you are. I thank you kindly for leaving your nice reply for me. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Bluesy - I read your writing, and the first impression was that I felt an ocean breeze, and I was at a beach taking in these words. One of your best... BC |
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