navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #46 » coalesced consummation
Open Poetry #46
Post A Reply Post New Topic coalesced consummation Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2010-08-04 07:24 AM



you kept your smile subdued slightly
as if it would be a few hours later
before I might know your full intentions
and if there were whisper places available

like parking for the mulsanne I imagined
you didn't just curb it by a whim side
but looked around for that special place
or a valet that was armed with full attention

the tapping of your nails on my sleeve then
asking me things in french and spanish
as if you didn't speak my language
but your eyes said you did wickedly accurate

and that my nodding in agreement had penalties
which you would address privately and slowly
if I wouldn't mind assisting you in punishment
of those conservative parts of both of us

when we had a month or so for coalescing

_____________

daark (jaguars of glass)


© Copyright 2010 ©Dark 2k - All Rights Reserved
Cpat Hair
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Patricius
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793

1 posted 2010-08-04 07:43 AM


as always...tightly woven, great wordplay, and undercurrents for the reader to play with..

looking forward to more of the series Sir.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
2 posted 2010-08-04 10:27 AM


Cpat..thanks amigo, much appreciated
Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
3 posted 2010-08-09 07:12 AM


coalescing now that's a new word and I love its meaning ...

I missed reading you! To begin with you means to soar in the skies of true poetry.

Delightful!

Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
4 posted 2010-08-09 07:16 AM


ms mar...so great to have you back...have missed your eyes lady friend
Amaryllis
Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306
Mi now
5 posted 2010-08-09 01:25 PM


Wow I have missed much good poetry while I was away.. intruiging read, Dark.. and well done, as always..
Best to you..
~Amaryllis

noman
Junior Member
since 2009-12-26
Posts 18

6 posted 2010-08-09 02:06 PM


This is very good.  I like it.
Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
7 posted 2010-08-09 02:51 PM


Amary' thanks lady...nice to see you back, hope the vacation was muy bueno.

_______________

noman, thank you for the read

nebulous_nymph
Junior Member
since 2008-03-02
Posts 37
Inertia
8 posted 2010-08-09 08:36 PM


another aching hearton,,,,,,
love yer stuff

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
9 posted 2010-08-10 07:00 AM


NN, sure is fun to see your reads..thanks babe
Angel4aKing
Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372
USA
10 posted 2010-08-10 03:30 PM


From your poetry i would say that ur life is far from boring.... I once hoped for jus a moment of coalescing and got it  but a mth....wow...maybe I will have to hope harder....

~~~kingsangel~~~

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
11 posted 2010-08-10 04:12 PM


ms angle....thanks for the eyes lady...and I do refuse to be bored...be well ms
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
12 posted 2010-08-10 04:15 PM


I'm certainly enjoying the teeth of the jag
today, yes, I am.

Smiling.

At you.




Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
13 posted 2010-08-10 04:18 PM


ms sun....am pleased that the sharp edges whet your attention.  Thanks babe
Earl Brinkman
Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan
14 posted 2010-08-10 08:05 PM


Enjoyed this piece as usual.  You do have a knack for making a reader want to come back for more.
Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
15 posted 2010-08-10 09:23 PM


EB, thanks so much guy.
Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #46 » coalesced consummation

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary