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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2010-08-03 08:52 PM


The eyes of carnies never did
bother me at all, I wished
to have the freedom that they had
bad reputations all of them
knew it and they donned the skin
of lesser-blest disabled men.
I-knew-that-they-knew how to win;
to beat the games we'd play--
they'd spin

the wheel

and bark:
"All bets are placed!"
They tapped their feet
impatience feigned
as their toes kept time and traced
the ball to stop upon the space
left uncovered by the coin.

Yes, I do, still envy them,
even with their gap-toothed grins -
their yellow eyes with blotch-blood reams
which bulge indulgences in gleam
those bites of life that burst their seams
as cauliflowered noses screamed

evidence

of death of dreams

understanding

"games are rigged"

I shrugged my life away to them

knowing that they would be gone...

before the sun saw businessday--

I loved the honest con.

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Marchmadness
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1 posted 2010-08-03 09:07 PM


I love this and the honest con too. I think we shold send a few carnies to Washington to teach them how to run an "honest" con game.
                            Ida

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2010-08-03 09:12 PM


You're almost spot-on, which is kinda like having the space next to the winner. *wince*

I was thinking vaguely politically, although in the past and more locally, when La. citizens had a valid choice--A Nazi former KKK member, or the crooked Edwin Edwards whose informal campaign slogan was "Hold your nose and vote for me!"

Ah...the good old days!

Thanks for playing--er, reading. *smile*


easy1
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since 2010-05-22
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3 posted 2010-08-04 12:59 PM


By the pricking of my thumbs, in sodden shoes the morning comes... apologies
A good read, although you perhaps left out the green spit and those "brave" remarks to nerdy-looking customers. Although, come to think of it, a carny blessed with a ferris wheel is almost big enough to be labelled a circus.

Cpat Hair
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4 posted 2010-08-04 07:41 AM


evidence

of death of dreams

understanding

"games are rigged"

I shrugged my life away to them

knowing that they would be gone...

before the sun saw businessday--

I loved the honest con.
the ending truly brings it to a close and tells us too you know.....
very nicely written ma'am...and as always a pleasure to read with internal rhyme as well as great imagery...

Earl Brinkman
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Osaka, Japan
5 posted 2010-08-10 08:32 PM


Same comment as Cpat Hair.  This was a clever write.
Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
6 posted 2010-08-12 12:21 PM


serenity blaze - now if the honest cons would go to DC, and show the unhonest cons how to be even somewhat honest, then perhaps we would be in a little better shape. Unfortunately, I don't believe the unhonest cons in DC will ever change...

BC

latearrival
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7 posted 2010-08-12 12:59 PM


I Love this. You my dear seem to be able to write about anything and bring meaning to it. latearrival/jo
Martie
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8 posted 2010-08-12 01:17 PM


hi Karen...I'll have a corndog and stop atop the ferris wheel.  You can see all over from up there.  
Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
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West Coast
9 posted 2010-08-12 01:31 PM


all we have left out here is carne asada..and the gap tooth vendors..well and a few ferrys wheels down socal way..

enjoyed your stuff ms k

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26
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The Southwest
10 posted 2010-08-17 12:31 PM




Uncle Carter was a carnie
he was married to two women
when he died Aunt Dolly buried him in Georgia
Aunt Jewel had him dug up and buried him in Texas
they both loved him so

and I love the honest con and envy them too

you have reminded me of old family tales Karen
thank you

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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Spring, Texas
11 posted 2010-08-17 01:14 AM


...REVIVE Pontchartrain Beach!!!

Lets return History to the history.


Amaryllis
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Mi now
12 posted 2010-08-17 01:23 AM


Amen to JWesley..!

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Serenity.. this was amazing.. truly your style is captivating.
~Amaryllis

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