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Open Poetry #46

The Purple Barn

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

0 posted 2010-07-28 08:48 AM

Here is the purple-painted barn
With sunflowers growing outside,
Near to an old abandoned farm
Awaiting the bulldozer's pride.

See how the sun fades paint to wood,
And how the green weeds try to climb?
Icicle shadows reversed could---
That's how it looked last wintertime.

When cold howls, and planks hibernate
In tune with the freezing of mind.
At last, a crocus to vibrate
And dormant new grasses to find.

Whispering twilight warns of night.
This dark old barn soon fades from sight.

OldBuddyOldPal
Member

since 2008-12-15

Posts 87

1 posted 2010-07-28 03:18 PM

I really liked this poem. It flows very nicely and your words painted a wonderful picture of this scene. Bravo.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2010-08-01 10:31 PM

Fine writing...James

Novus_Os
Member

since 2010-07-21

Posts 115
West Coast, USA

3 posted 2010-08-01 10:54 PM

I like all the references here, the natural setting, the relation to the human condition.
Very nicely done. To return the compliment, great poem!

Best Regards,

Novus_Os

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

4 posted 2010-08-01 10:57 PM

oh yes easy1
this is an outstanding piece of work

Donovan Callinan
Junior Member

since 2010-08-01

Posts 37
Omaha, Nebraska U.S.

5 posted 2010-08-01 11:43 PM

Near perfect use of the Shakespearian sonnet form. The couplet resolves the poem nicely.

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

6 posted 2010-08-02 01:11 PM

Paints a lovely picture in my mind.
Ida

Earl Brinkman
Senior Member

since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

7 posted 2010-08-02 07:40 PM

A well written piece. You have outdone yourself.

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