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Open Poetry #46

residue of evening

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2010-07-22 07:13 AM

morning now is that mist of minutes
that sprinkles on one's skin habit
and leaves the residue of evening
like a fond memory wafting as coffee

you smile from your window at the sound
when metal thunder makes your dog growl
and you whisper shhh to him with a toe
to his tickle my fancy rib playful place

I can see the candle behind your fingers
as you blow color from it's life quietly
and tiptoe down a hallway to gingerbread
where you are the sheet dancer waitress

and later you will make cereal for roger
and coffee for daddy and his important day
then spin your ring for hours wondering
why slow dancing makes you feel addicted

and when can you find time to be fixed again

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daark (jaguars of glass)

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2010-07-22 10:02 AM

Greatly impressed with the series sir...

you open this one in a way to be envied then end it in a way to allow the reader plenty of lines to read between..

very nice indeed.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

2 posted 2010-07-22 11:09 AM

cpat..thanks guy...it is a fun series to explore

Eusta B. Mae
Senior Member

since 2010-05-03

Posts 903

3 posted 2010-07-22 11:27 AM

-then spin your ring for hours wondering
why slow dancing makes you feel addicted

and when can you find time to be fixed again-
There is a lot between those lines that gets the imagination going...EBM

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

4 posted 2010-07-22 12:42 PM

thank you ms

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