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Amaryllis
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since 2010-05-20
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Mi now

0 posted 2010-07-13 11:16 PM



Out on the ozone night
where insects click
and phosphoresce,
glinting shadows
mime a sky,
black velvet blue
shot through
with distant ice,
out in the perfumed night
of moist and pine,
of mulch and earth
of lake edge fecund steam
and night bloom sweet,
to taste the dying day
blush her last
in a sherbet west,
out on the waves
a watercolor fleet,
harmonized by echoes
of the loon,
in reply
a smug and tired moon
rests upon the
forest silhouette,
a thousand moonlets
scatter the dark waves,
the water slaps
a sleepy lullaby
upon the shore,
or on the old
wood dock,
and campfire smoke
moves upon the eye,
teased by browning
marshmallow dreams again,
drifts easy on this
lazy evening,
across the lake
to seek the
far shore now.
.
The cabins glow
with welcome
windows fire,
warm with life
that spills through
every square,
and gilds the fern and
tree trunks
sleeping near,
laughter, voices,
children singing,
hear,..
this melody become
a symphony,
the cadence of the
summer`s
rhapsody,
and nod along
in time, this
chorus bright,,
acapella, music
of the night.

© Copyright 2010 Amaryllis - All Rights Reserved
Richy
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1 posted 2010-07-14 12:56 PM



Amarylis, you're back!

Oh gosh and what a fantastic poem to greet us again with!

So beautiful.

Welcome home dear friend,
you've been missed!

Richard

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2 posted 2010-07-14 01:50 AM


There is nothing like a Pacific Northwest Acapella is there.   Lovely!
Cpat Hair
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3 posted 2010-07-14 09:47 AM


quite a beautiful image you paint...

indeed one can feel the peace seep into them as they read..

Dark Stranger
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West Coast
4 posted 2010-07-14 01:16 PM


and a distant harley thunders to add purposive disturbance..(grin) kewl stuff ms
Amaryllis
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Mi now
5 posted 2010-07-14 07:28 PM


Richy, thank you so much!     Really I am just still on vacation, so I`m only able to pop in from time to time.. I`m not `gone`!     But thanks so much for the wonderful words, my friend!
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Mysteria.. actually, Ilm in Mi right now.. though the Pac NW deserves it`s own song, too!  
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CpatH.. thank you very much! Your words mean a lot  
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Dark..  lol!  Maybe it does need a Harley, at that!  
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~Amaryllis

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
6 posted 2010-08-15 01:37 PM


The title was irresistible and what you present here is a gourmet dish of poetic atmosphere.

Highly enjoyed.

Love,
Margherita

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
7 posted 2010-08-15 03:28 PM


A mighty fine write and a great read for me at the end of my day. I feel as if I'm there.

Helen

Amaryllis
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since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306
Mi now
8 posted 2010-08-15 04:09 PM


Thank you, Margherita and Helen! You make me smile  
~Amaryllis

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
9 posted 2010-08-15 11:14 PM


Exceptionally well written, Amaryllis.
                              Ida

Jesse Jaymz
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since 2000-01-24
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Youngstown, ohio
10 posted 2010-08-16 11:00 PM


Very very nice!!!
The Lady
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since 2005-12-26
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The Southwest
11 posted 2010-08-17 12:54 PM




I see those thousand moonlets
hear the water slap
and I am mesmerized

Amaryllis
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since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306
Mi now
12 posted 2010-08-17 01:26 AM


Thank you Ida, Jesse, and Lady..!  It means alot, and thanks for reading  
~Amaryllis

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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Spring, Texas
13 posted 2010-08-17 01:45 AM


The part that struck me the most was the part that did make it to print...the slapping and cussing of mosquitoes and other critters, the no-breath-of-air-humidity, sweat gushing of my body and not even a wisp of air to turn it into cooling mositure...and of course the poison ivy scratching I'm now doing. And then there's the snakes thinking your hot body is the perfect resting place.  And we don't hear loons, we hear toad frogs, bull frogs, tree frogs, a pair of frogs in the next tent, mating... I tried walking down to the lakes edge but the two orange (about a foot apart) glowing lights in the beam of my own) advised me not too...well actually they were saying, "c'mon, boy....c'mon over".

Sorry...really enjoyed you piece...just couldn't help myself...by the way, I moved inside to respond to your piece...couldn't take the 'beauty of nightlife" any longer...here in the wilds of So. Texas.


Snicker, snicker...

Amaryllis
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since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306
Mi now
14 posted 2010-08-17 01:59 AM


Oohhh jwesley I am laughing so hard right now..!     That above, ladies and gentlemen, was the unvarnished truth, courtesy of jwesley! Lol!  Because YES we did get eaten alive in Mi.. agh I had forgotten how bad the skeeties were!  
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Truly.. thanks for the kind words..  (glad I got you to come inside  `away from it all`)  
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~Amaryllis  

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
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Durban, South Africa
15 posted 2010-08-17 01:16 PM


Amaryllis, you speak my language.  This is the type of poetry I need to read when I am mega-stressed (and at any other time for that matter!).  Thank you for the wonderful experience.  I am still there.

Owl

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