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2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

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by the sea

0 posted 2010-07-11 05:13 AM

Above the school,
white gulls fly.
The pupils left,
it is the holidays.
I miss freedom,
the sun can’t replace it.

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2010-07-11 02:13 PM

I enjoyed this but I think freedom is a state of mind, and like to think that I have always been free to fly. Try it!

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

2 posted 2010-07-12 03:00 AM

o you are so true mysteria, thanks for the excellent words that have transformed my day,
I am grateful cause I can doit too.

thanks my friend

yann

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

3 posted 2010-07-12 03:38 AM

I loved you poem, Yann. However, it is a misconception that birds are free . . . they are forever looking over their shoulder (metaphorically) . . . in flight, in resting on a rock, in the nest - for winds too strong, for birds/animals of prey, and that just for a start. Yet they epitomise freedom in their brave confrontation of the elements and enemies, and in the precautions they take so that they can "fly free" and embrace life in the round - and in so doing, they inspire us who are far more equipped for survival, to do the same. I have SO much love and admiration for these fragile little creatures.

easy1
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since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

4 posted 2010-07-12 03:28 PM

I get a little more of a "time flies" feeling from this. Well, there has to be more than one way to be free... Besides, don't those gulls really belong down at the beach? Thoughtful work, thanks for the good read.

Joe Houck
Member

since 2001-04-23

Posts 324
california

5 posted 2010-07-12 03:32 PM

the moon can't replace it either.
I asked... =)

Joe

LindsayP
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since 2007-07-28

Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria

6 posted 2010-07-12 11:38 PM

A cute poem Yann enjoyed

Lindsay

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

7 posted 2010-07-13 01:50 AM

I think Mysteria is very wise, yann and gives good advice.
Ida

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

8 posted 2010-07-13 09:08 AM

Thanks Owl for the very interesting and thoughtful comment,birds are the most sponrtaneous animals, always ready to flee, always in alert, but it doen't seem to cause them troubles, it is in their dep nature, instinctive and surprising...

have a nice day

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

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by the sea

9 posted 2010-07-13 09:12 AM

thanks a lot easy1 for the lovely considerations about my work, your supportive comment is helpful and I agree there are many ways to be free, perhaps everyone has his way..

have a nice day

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

10 posted 2010-07-13 09:14 AM

thanks Joe for the comment, smiles and truth.

have a nice day

yann

2islander2
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by the sea

11 posted 2010-07-13 09:15 AM

thanks Lindsay for reading and commenting, I appreciated it.

regards

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

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by the sea

12 posted 2010-07-13 09:16 AM

Thanks Ida for the comment, I truely believe that.

regards

yann

Amaryllis
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since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

13 posted 2010-07-13 11:43 PM

I also liked this wistful poem.. very well said

~Amaryllis

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