A Flatland Dawn / Squirrels Shake Branches

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Open Poetry #46

A Flatland Dawn / Squirrels Shake Branches

easy1
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since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

0 posted 2010-07-09 08:47 AM

A Flatland Dawn

Dark isles, trees upon
a distant Florida mist...
Cars, trucks whisper by.

****

Squirrels Shake Branches

Squirrels shake branches,
not as wind, but as children
on a play mission.

Lamar Cole
Member

since 2009-05-01

Posts 274

1 posted 2010-07-09 12:09 PM

Nice.

martiniat8
Senior Member

since 2003-06-21

Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

2 posted 2010-07-09 01:21 PM

I never really gotte the feel for writing haikus. You, my fried, have. Well done.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

3 posted 2010-07-09 01:36 PM

kind of a blend of hai and sen..stirred not shaken, enjoyed it ez1

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

4 posted 2010-07-13 01:33 PM

this is superb, the brievety equals the power of images...thanks for sharing.

yann

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

5 posted 2010-07-13 02:28 PM

Very pleasant feel to this.
Ida

brian thomas madden
Junior Member

since 2010-07-08

Posts 32
Ireland (between an ocean and a rock)

6 posted 2010-07-13 02:32 PM

Really enjoyed these

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2010-07-13 11:04 PM

I guess I don't miss Florida as mush as I first did but enjoyed your words

Amaryllis
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since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

8 posted 2010-07-13 11:25 PM

Wonderful wordsmithing once again! Nicely done, easy1

~Amaryllis

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

9 posted 2010-07-17 06:27 AM

Thanks to all for your kind words.

I can understand why people sometimes come to love those Florida ranch and grove flatlands, just by observing their beauty upon occasion. I hope they are preserved well for generations to come.

As for tree squirrels, the young like to play, but they can also be vexing little varmints. Hard to hold it against them too much, though.

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