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easy1
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since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

0 posted 2010-06-28 02:57 PM




I wander dark halls---
to a radio playing
American Band!
Far from the cadets' meeting,
moments of truth repeating.


****


When horses go so
far they just want to drop, I
wonder, do they see
their names written in real clouds,
with exclamation points? (!)



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Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
1 posted 2010-06-28 06:50 PM


Yo easy1,

These work rather well.

Bobby

Bastet
Member
since 2010-05-07
Posts 246

2 posted 2010-06-29 02:28 AM


Ah, you're back with more haiku. That's great, very much fun to read, much appreciated. They both work well. I personally can relate better to the second one about the horses. Have a look at my poem about the birth of a baby horse. I'd like your opinion.
bel1e
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since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631

3 posted 2010-06-30 01:42 PM


enjoyed !

         

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