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Skilerz
Junior Member

since 2010-06-26

Posts 22
Malaysia,Negeri Sembilan

0 posted 2010-06-26 05:20 PM

Hye guys Im a newbie here and this is the very first poem I've ever wrote after living for 16years and I dont really know how to write one it is just random so please leave a comment.

The Endless Pain

I am sitting here all alone with
the pain in my chest
No one know how it feels to live with
thousands of misery,pretending to be happy,
faking each and every smile
trying to hide the truth eventhough
deep down inside my heart Im crying.

Dreaming and wishing
someone could end the pain,
Hoping for my dream to come true,
But I realized the fact that there is
no such thing as
"Dreams and wishes do come true"
and the only thing I know is
nightmare do come true and
the endless pain will remain..

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

1 posted 2010-06-26 06:03 PM

Welcome to the Passions forums, Skilerz! I see from reading your profile that you reside in Malaysia, so a special welcome to one who is from a land far away (to most of us here, anyway).

This is a pretty good poem, in my humble opinion, and certainly gets the message of despair across. Your English language skills are good. Keep writing, please!

Kethry D
Member

since 2010-04-12

Posts 64
Australia

2 posted 2010-06-26 09:10 PM

Hi Skilerz, this is a good first attempt. Welcome to Passions.

A poet must leave traces of his passing not proof.

Rene Char

Skilerz
Junior Member

since 2010-06-26

Posts 22
Malaysia,Negeri Sembilan

3 posted 2010-06-27 03:46 AM

yeah Im from malaysia.I was google-ing last night and I found this forum and decided to post this

thx guys

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2010-06-27 09:09 AM

Welcome to Passions, Skilerz. You found PiP just like I did...and I've been here for a decade now. You'll enjoy it over time, so read, respond, share your poetry...and have a great time! If you ever have any questions, please feel free to call on a moderator. We're here to help.

In the meantime, check your email for a very Special Greeting!

" It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

Skilerz
Junior Member

since 2010-06-26

Posts 22
Malaysia,Negeri Sembilan

5 posted 2010-06-27 12:07 PM

will do

thanks for commenting

Eldest
Member

since 2010-06-15

Posts 177
Alabama

6 posted 2010-06-28 04:54 PM

I'm glad you joined us, these are some very wonderfully kind people who will reach out to you.

OldBuddyOldPal
Member

since 2008-12-15

Posts 87

7 posted 2010-06-28 07:05 PM

Dear Skilerz,
I do not write much on here but I do come to read each day. These are kind and caring people with varying degrees of talent. Know, though, that no matter the skill their work will make you laugh, will comfort you and will warm your heart.

Dadygoose
Member

since 2010-01-01

Posts 162
A Communist country

8 posted 2010-06-28 07:15 PM

Hello Zeksler did I spell that right?
It is true that there are standard grammatical rules about punctuation and sentence structure, which you may be learning about in school.
However poetry is a fluid medium that requires stretching the standard rules of grammar and composition, so you can write hoever you feel up here and it is acceptable.
Your English composition teachers can help to write with clarity and skill.
Your dreams will come true. Fantasies are what your future will be made of. They will come true even if you don’t want them to.
And don’t let others talk them out of you. Dreams are what keeps us alive, for without them, we die.
I am Dadygoose!

Hey, nobody's human!

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