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Open Poetry #46

two consecutive shorts

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

0 posted 2010-06-25 02:58 AM

On hose, on toes,
a fashion-plate battleship:
Bet she drives raal slow.

****

The girl seemed too old
to be riding in the back,
as I let you pass.

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

1 posted 2010-06-25 01:26 PM

enjoyed my read.

regards

yann

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

2 posted 2010-06-25 02:49 PM

Yo Easy1,

The first one works well. Are the two poems somehow related?

Bobby

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

3 posted 2010-06-25 06:30 PM

Yes, Bobby, they are, and as always my 'shorts' stem from real observations.

LindsayP
Member Elite

since 2007-07-28

Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria

4 posted 2010-06-25 09:59 PM

Sorry Easy I don't really understand it,

Lindsay

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